It is really good and there is little that can be improved in my opinion i can read this all day. I think that the only improvement would be to have a freind proof read for errors in spelling and gramatical errors but it is a great story overall.
Slewis
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LIKEWell you can make some or tell them your writing is grat and im sure anyone you tell will love the story
Slewis:Happy you like it :) And yeah i don't have a lot of friends that know I write lol