First of all, your world system is very promising. I have read many famous translated books. I found your world system quite a bit promising compared to them. There are a few areas where you can develop more if you revise. Character design, story development, and update quality are very good. There will always be some areas to develop. Every famous writer's writing also has these faults. Lastly, I will just say that your English writing is not good. You should revise your writing. There are many errors in punctuation, spelling, grammar. You can try the Grammarly app. It may be helpful to you.
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