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TheSpiderNextDoor
TheSpiderNextDoorLv45yr
2020-01-11 00:34

Overall, the story was pretty fun to read! Like the previous reviews stated, there are some punctuation and grammatical errors. Some repeated spelling errors would be least written as 'lest' and first written as '1st, but I would(and will) continue reading this!

Reincarnated as a Fallen Angel

Slewis
4.6
82 Chs

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Slewis
SlewisAuthor

Thank you, I use my phone to write and have started using the app Grammarly to help out with the on the fly grammar since I use write then post without putting much thought into revising my work, but as I go on ill eventually get on my laptop and correct everything!

5yr
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Mythical_Being
Mythical_BeingLv12

This is the first book I read on this platform and I could not stop reading it. The lore and backstory of the world itself is amazing not mentioning the characters amazing backstory(which hasnt been released yet when I post this, so I'm excited). The items and skills are very unique and remind me a lot of my favorite animes but less Op and more realistic and relatable. The only critique I have is the grammar and wording but I just corrected it in my head and re read if I dont get it so it's not a bug thing. 10/10 would reread again a million times.

4yr

Delicious_Staples
Delicious_StaplesLv4

This is absolutely awesome. This caught my eye, and got me hooked since the beginning. You won't regret reading this!!! Thank you for the good writing!! :)

4yr
jexnni
jexnniLv4

This story has a great beginning and I can't wait for more, It makes me want to just write my own ending so I'm satisfied with an ending, but then I'll know that I want more... 😌 The only problem I have with this story are the minor grammatical errors, but otherwise this is one of the best ones yet! ♡♡♡♡

5yr
TheCabbageLu
TheCabbageLuLv13

It's good! It's quiet different from other same theme novels that i read. I love how you build the world background and it seems that you put a little too much details. But that's fine actually. I love little shadow so much Good Luck!

5yr
AnOrdinaryCitizen6
AnOrdinaryCitizen6Lv4

First of all, your world system is very promising. I have read many famous translated books. I found your world system quite a bit promising compared to them. There are a few areas where you can develop more if you revise. Character design, story development, and update quality are very good. There will always be some areas to develop. Every famous writer's writing also has these faults. Lastly, I will just say that your English writing is not good. You should revise your writing. There are many errors in punctuation, spelling, grammar. You can try the Grammarly app. It may be helpful to you.

5yr
Jeysss
JeysssLv2

To be completely honest, I see it as one of the 'typical' reincarnations I see on a daily basis around the webnovel platform. The story feels bland and it feels like it centers around reincarnation for the sake of being a reincarnation genre. There's nothing new except for some slightly changed concepts here and there. All I see are the same overpowered stuff, the same slimes, the same adventurer's guild, the same magic crystal, and the same concepts repeated over and over again. A good and unique world crafted with care doesn't hurt anyone, it just takes dedication and time. The protagonist feels off in a sense that she has times where she completely shifts in mood and acting out of character, giving the readers an off idea that she's not a well-built and solid character. Overall, it has potential to improve, of course. But as of right now, I can't immerse myself in the world the author is trying to make. Sorry if I came off as too picky or rude, but we need criticisms like these to help us see the limitations of our novels and improve our writing.

5yr
Sigheti
SighetiLv4

With much enthusiasm and avidity, the author presents us with an engaging story. The storyline, as well as the presentation and design of the characters throughout the story, continue to be winsome. While I find that it often lacks rhythm, I am still of the opinion that it is a relaxing read, very suited for this platform. I wish you a lot of fun continuing your story .

5yr
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