Review Detail of SoftScratch in Vampire in a changed world

I really like this story. It seems pretty interesting but has a few problems at the moment. First is that the Grammar needs some work. I’d recommend getting an editor to smooth things out so that it becomes more pleasant to read. Although there isn’t much development right now, that’s something that can be added in over time so just work on that slowly. It’s a pretty fun read and I hope this one can make some progress and become a bit novel :)