Review Detail of Pleasedeteme in [QT] SAVE THE VILLAINESS : SYSTEM IN PROGRESS
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Hmmm after reading this.. it's decent.. and not bad to read.. specially if you like otome games this is maybe a good read for you. The story develops comically which is indeed at times funny. Also your way of putting cliffhangers got better.. The main character is quiet funny at times.. and her clumsiness makes it a attractive personality traits.. - - - - - Well, improve the grammar by using word document or grammarly as helping hand. Try to make scenes vivid said it again in case Make the story more fluid like water if you want it aggressive you can do so as water goes both ways.. by making dialogues more clearer and also adding inner dialogues more sophisticatly. Make the story more dramatic and add plot twists.. and try to avoid cliche unless you make it skillfully good. Also try not to make the system too op as to make the story more interesting and funny.. Constructive criticism. I hope to see how your writing turns out... signed.. Your Dear Maximus-senpai
[QT] SAVE THE VILLAINESS : SYSTEM IN PROGRESS
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Pleasedeteme:👌👍... I shall be world's number one... but anyway your welcome try mine
I want to become an evil cruel person that work for the evil society. I want to kill many people and died while dragging one of the hero friends. Killing him/her.
Pleasedeteme:Fify-san as for the mini world how you look like? to be included there..
I want to become an evil cruel person that work for the evil society. I want to kill many people and died while dragging one of the hero friends. Killing him/her.
Pleasedeteme:Fify-san as for the mini world how you look like? to be included there..
I meant appearance like hair colour etc.. ... don't worry you will be the bad guy.. but in a different funny way..
Carciphones_02:I want to become an evil cruel person that work for the evil society. I want to kill many people and died while dragging one of the hero friends. Killing him/her.
Long gray hair. Long sharp nail. Pale face like a vampire. Teeth like a shark. Has annoying laugh and personality. Laugh like this.."Kuhihi.. Ahkyakya kkkaahhaha!!!!!" Just like beltergeus from re zero.
Pleasedeteme:I meant appearance like hair colour etc.. ... don't worry you will be the bad guy.. but in a different funny way..
Carciphones_02:Long gray hair. Long sharp nail. Pale face like a vampire. Teeth like a shark. Has annoying laugh and personality. Laugh like this.."Kuhihi.. Ahkyakya kkkaahhaha!!!!!" Just like beltergeus from re zero.
Pleasedeteme:Bella weird I asked for real appearance but that will do.. don't regret it..