If I'm rating on my stories, I will give my:- writing quality- 3 star stability of updates- 2 star Story Development- 4 star Character Design - 4 star World Background- 4 star I used Grammarly on my writing, but only the basic ones, so there might be a lot of other mistakes that I didn't know. The stability of updates for my novels suck. That's because I get distracted easily. And also, sometimes I forgot what is the right word to use for a certain activity that results in me watching anime and reading other's novel. I think the story development is pretty good. I have already thought of many scenes and actions and the direction of where this novel will go. But the only thing that dragging me down right now is the stability of updates. For Character design, I think it will be fine If you could give me time to explore and give all of them certain traits that will result in the way they all act. Meaning, they all have reasons for their personality and views on the world. lastly, for the world background, I think only me that can see it now. Because you are supposed to understand the world-building by reading my other novel. But yeah... the updates suck too. That's all. You should rate my novel too so I get to I know which part In the novel that I can fix. This way, I can improve my writing skill and your reading experience at the same time.

Alright, the move is nice. Your normal system novel and subsided missions. The twist in it is that the MC has to protect and help the villainess while still being close friends of the female lead. Well the villainess herself ain't bad, just a victim of family standards. Then the stupid annoying ball system, that likes to give our MC a headache. My only problem with this book is the grammatical errors. Not much but it should be checked, almost all writers have that. And the update stability, stop being lazy with anime author and write. U would give ur readers an update starvation. Not nice. Anyway nice work, keep it up. Ohh FYI, I think there is future Yuri.

Hmmm after reading this.. it's decent.. and not bad to read.. specially if you like otome games this is maybe a good read for you. The story develops comically which is indeed at times funny. Also your way of putting cliffhangers got better.. The main character is quiet funny at times.. and her clumsiness makes it a attractive personality traits.. - - - - - Well, improve the grammar by using word document or grammarly as helping hand. Try to make scenes vivid said it again in case Make the story more fluid like water if you want it aggressive you can do so as water goes both ways.. by making dialogues more clearer and also adding inner dialogues more sophisticatly. Make the story more dramatic and add plot twists.. and try to avoid cliche unless you make it skillfully good. Also try not to make the system too op as to make the story more interesting and funny.. Constructive criticism. I hope to see how your writing turns out... signed.. Your Dear Maximus-senpai

I wish the novel has more chapters. Oh well, into the review. The book is good and all, still for a system story it is fairly decent. I wish there are more twists in the future. I'm waiting for that author.

This story is quite unique and fun it also has a bit of yuri and it will take place in several worlds so we will get to have many stories with our mc (≧▽≦)(☆▽☆) I totally loved it and enjoyed very much ❤️ (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*.✧(≧▽≦)

The story was promising I really loved the start of the novel as of soul and body two different things the novel goes very smoothly but there were petty mistakes like punctuation and capitalization And if the writter manages to solve these problems the novel is lit

The story itself is good and interesting but I feel the system is taking away too much attention from the plot as a whole. I read 10 chapters and I still don't really know what's going on which is weird because why and the reasons are really not clear, or is it a future development? The writing is good but distracting at points and I would really like more details about the background too if it's possible. Maybe I need to read a little more to get all the information I need?

Thanks for giving me that power stone ages I never I got to thank sorry for taking so long and your book seems really good and I thanks for liking my book

In the end, continue reading and I end up hooking the story, my recommendation is to skip the chapters from 1 to 20 since they are quite bad, from then on the story is entertaining