Review Detail of AstralJuggernaught in The Portable Dungeon

Honestly, other than the slightly interesting idea of a pocket dungeon, this story is very very bad all around. From screaming pansy MC too stupid to wipe **** off his hands, to massive info dump right out the gates, to word padding contextually worthless history lessons, pointless redshirting, a Deus-ex asspull, and now tortuous pedophilia?!?!! Its like your building a cabin out of ****!!!