Item: The Portable Dungeon
Rating: 1
Author: NIRVANAFLAME1

NIRVANAFLAME1Lv145yr

2020-01-10 23:33

first 7 chapters were good and interesting then pure bull**** story dont know why u took that route but well just disappointing 😞😞😞😞😞😞😞😞

The Portable Dungeon

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