????? This novel is unreadable. The first 5 chapters set you up for a standard weak to strong system novel. But in the next two chapters, there's a massive time skip with no forewarning whatsoever. I mean, there's absolutely no flow in the story so far. Shit just happens because the author says so. Oh, the protagonist has a good relationship with Nico, does he? Well, I wouldn't fucking know because you didn't even write a single word about her or their meeting. I just know because you listed it in the status. He can change into many forms? Wowowow it sure is nice to know that, but it'd be even nicer if I could read why he can do it. The grammar is also god-awful and punctuation is all over the place. There's also no action scenes so far, it just skips over them and goes straight to the protagonist eating his enemies like some sort of cannibal. This is all coming from someone who lived a normal life on Earth. He was smart, sure, but that doesn't mean he can change his views and morals at the drop of a hat. Like really? You're just going to make your protagonist go from being a normal kid on earth into a supreme cannibalistic killing machine without any actual character development? Yeah, this is a bit too much, even with my already depreciating standards.
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First of all I am sorry about grammar because I am kinda new to this, next thing is that if you read the prologue you would know that he is not a 'normal ' kid, I stated he is a killer due to reasons, I also had a monologue about how he is in for getting stronger on his own, that is why he can not use the 'system' to level up, I am looking in the long run of things. The relationship is because he made a clone that infiltrated Crocodiles org. And got closer to Robin, he is a type of character that can adapt to ALL situations, he knows what he wants and knows he would have to do things that are inhuman for example an inspiration for his ability came from RE:MONSTER, a guy who became a goblin and can get enemies abilities by eating their heart and brain. SO please I understand that everyone has their different views on every thing but don't bring up things that I have addressed... The grammar being wrong is something I can't argue back about neither can I say anything about the action scene but I promise that I will give out action scenes as it is what my novel is gonna be about.
Oh and one more thing in chapter 3, it states that once devoured he can change into them perfectly with no flaws
Oh and one more thing in chapter 3, it states that once devoured he can change into them perfectly with no flaws
