Honestly? I'd like to ask what were you on? Marijuana? Something stronger? Cause what you wrote is just fuc!ing confusing. It's like you were having a fuc!ing seizure while writing it. I'm just... disappointed, you know? It had a good premise, Escanor without his weakness to darkness/night but just as prideful reborn in DC however you destroyed it with your writing. You go through events too fast, they are abrupt, no world building. For example in some chp he went from talking to a condescending Elven Queen to killing some dude named something Destiny in like 2 fuc!ing seconds. It's just bad, horrible I would even say.
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