Review Detail of _Sha in Ethan; A Story Untold (HxH fanfic)

This review is not part of any review swap, as I always stress on the basic idea that all the authors learn with the time, their own style, their grip on the story and all that comes with time, being freshman in the writing world, it's no doubt a good effort, the certain part of development lapse the actual strength of the character, and I hope fellow author will come up such problems in future, last but not least, the grammar is better than my own writing, so yeah, enjoy the reading...