Review Detail of rolas in ЕНтереерц

Writing Quality: Grammar is non-existent. I get that a lot of people are not english natives (me too). But i expect at least a little knowledge of the language. In this case it's especially bad in case of the syntax. the whole thing is just jumbled together. The author doesn't seem to know how to even build simple english sentences. Example chapter 3: "Mother was on the evening busy, so that i asked it tomorrow can wether she help me with workouts, have father not wanted to ask, i thought in their relationship she was the main." I guess the author meant something along the lines of "My mother was busy in the evening so that i asked her whether she could help me tomorrow. I didn't want to ask father since our relationship wasn't that favorable." But i don't read stories to guess what the author wants to say. let alone as far as i can guess those should be at least 3 different sentences and not one big sentence with way to many comas. Stability of updates: there are roughly 1 chapter per day since dec. 23. so it is ok but to early to rate really. Story development: Can't really say. I didn't understand the first 3 chapters and then stopped. Character design: Again, in the 3 chapters i read i was more occupied with deciphering what the sentences meant then paying attention to the characters. What were their names again? World background: Same as character design. At least there seems to be magic? maybe? it could be a misunderstanding due to poor grammar. Conclusion: You took a step out of your comfort zone and wrote a story. Congrats on that. It needs courage to do that. All you have to do now is to stop writing and learn the english language before you continue. Or you could just write in your native tongue.