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WinnieLePooh
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2020-09-25 19:01

Writing Quality 5/5: Can't complain about this too much it's pretty much flawless which is an amazing upgrade compared to other novels. Sorry Development 2/5: This is where I have most of my problems, it's the same old the character gains too much stuff and completely forgets about said stuff and the stuff ends up being completely gone even when said stuff is important. Character Design 2/5: This is dogshit, it doesn't show the progress of his age and stuff, heck I don't even remember the last time you displayed the MCs hair colour, eye colour, height and stuff same with his fimiliars, you said they would go through genetic changes yet it seems as though nothing has happened. Updating Stability 4/5: It's good World Background 4/5: It's kinda un-needed as it's a fanfic and people can just Google shit so geab

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Started of good, but rapidly degraded. Webnovel rating system is a dumpster fire, so if I am being honest, it turned out to be 2.4 stars, even though it is better than other novels I rated with the same rating. The story starts of really good, but just becomes BS in a few chapters. His wishes are wasted, thinking idiotic in logic flawed. There are some moments that are so overplayed which makes it painful to read. All characters behave weirdly, both from canon and from the ff itself. The MC's personality is constantly contradicting itself, which is extremely annoying. His very goals become useless after chapter 5, when he forgets them. Every single one of his powers is misused and lacks any imagination. For example, there are almost no limits to his enchantments, which he could easily abuse to grow stronger at astronomic speeds. Yet he just creates two items which are incredibly stupid. A sword and a shield. A soul stealing sword and a soul binding shield. OK. The MC created it to improve, yet it didn't. He killed thousands of people with it, without asking a single question. HE HAS A SYSTEM, THAT WOULD ANSWER MOST QUESTIONS, yet he doesn't ask a single interesting question. He spends years living in the new world, yet he never once thinks for a second to bring out all of his own potential. He even has an ability that gives him ideas, yet he doesn't use it at all. This is just lazy writing. ||| Sorry for the negativity, I am way too tired both mentally and of stories with no thought put into them. A few things for the author: I recommend you don't use memes. They become old and stale after a month, which is annoying. I don't have too much of a problem with it, but still. Try to think of clever ways of using his powers. I find it extremely entertaining when I think of ways to use different supernatural powers. Well, I guess you don't have the time to think, so I can't really fault you (not that I could either way, just an expression). This it from my side, so good luck and have fun!

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