Overall decent story. The description of the story is a quote from the movie. He actually uses emoticons in the story. Some of them to impressive effect, I won't lie. I don't like that as a whole, but it's done well, so I can't deduct anything for it. There's grammatical improvements to be made here and there, but the story is easy enough to understand, and it's not hard to read. The author has also demonstrated a willingness to improve. I thought the story was a system designer type, but I was wrong. He doesn't create the system. It's unique in its own way, and the author seems to like to take their own version on any tropes. So as a whole, it's a unique story, and definitely worth giving a chance.
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