Review Detail of Kritiko in My Dragon System
Review detail
🧐WARNING: Loopholes are everywhere in this novel. When you try to give it some slack and let one or two pass, another one comes again. This is not a book for veteran readers specially those who like logical situations and expected outcomes prior to past events. (You've been warned). 🌱 Writing quality, well, grammatically, it's smooth. Logically, it sucks. 🔥Stability of the update is ok. 💧Story development is good because it shows how MC, after being reincarnated as a human, tries his best to be strong again, first for revenge, then later on to protect those he loves. BUT(that's a big but), the author failed miserably on giving logic to MC's childish and more like idiotic behavior wherein he was supposed to be more than a thousand year old experienced dragon. He even knows status window, I can only face palm at that. 💧Character design, well, not new. I was hoping the MC would be leaning to a logical kind of MC, but,... Well, people may argue that he was not used to being human and he was just a child, but here's the thing. Knowledge and wisdom comes from the mind right? 💧World background, not new again. 😎PS: I'd recommend this for new readers. 🎧 Currently listening to: HIRIE - Stay Wild
My Dragon System
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Thank you for the review, I just want to add my input for other people reading this review, When this review was written the person was on chapter 12, with all of my stories from those who know me I never reveal information at the begging of my story. My readers are always put in the situation of this is how it is, and I want my readers to ask why. Information gets released slowly as the story goes on. the status window was more from the readers perspective so the MC didn't have to keep saying, a rectangle transparent box appeared but because it is in the first person it comes off as a bit strange and as the dragon knew this knowledge. The later part of the story is written in the third person and I hope to change this in the future. Other then that I think this review was Very fair and well put, more reviews should be like this one, but I just wanted to inform and address any concerns future readers would have.
Ok thanks. You can rewrite it though. - questionable logic of the MC - questionable behavior of the MC (to put it appropriately, though he was loved by his parents fully as he grows up, he should still show inhibitions or loner behavior) and (he should be calm not childish) *If you said that he was the most powerful being of his race awakening a unique power despite being just a fledgling red dragon with only 30-100yrs of age 1000years ago, I would understand why he behaves in this novel somehow *Status window issue is a big NONO if you casually say your doing it for reader's sake. Newbies would scoff at it but not veterans. Remember, veterans are likely the ones who post in-depth reviews. -fighting in all four while biting the sword in his mouth, so far, I haven't read any dragon who does that. He's also a human, not an animal or a four legged being. He's limiting his constitutional advantage at that. Then he finally beats the training dummy/doll at lvl.1 with that fighting style? 🤷🤦 -Lastly, the world is an old setting from other old novels. *These are the main loopholes in the early chapters of your novel.
JKSManga:Thank you for the review, I just want to add my input for other people reading this review, When this review was written the person was on chapter 12, with all of my stories from those who know me I never reveal information at the begging of my story. My readers are always put in the situation of this is how it is, and I want my readers to ask why. Information gets released slowly as the story goes on. the status window was more from the readers perspective so the MC didn't have to keep saying, a rectangle transparent box appeared but because it is in the first person it comes off as a bit strange and as the dragon knew this knowledge. The later part of the story is written in the third person and I hope to change this in the future. Other then that I think this review was Very fair and well put, more reviews should be like this one, but I just wanted to inform and address any concerns future readers would have.