Review Detail of Plot_Armor in I’ve became an Overmind in Star Wars?? (Dropped-up for adoption)

The only appealing part of the fanfic is the promise of a crossover between Starcraft and Star Wars. This quickly breaks down in the first 3 chapters due to several showstopper issues in both the writing and the content of the story. Writing: the author does not have an editor or does not re-read his sentences, leaving glaring mistakes like "Hey" instead of "They" or "see" instead of "she" at multiple places in multiple chapters. Furthermore sentences are very long and tend to be in the form "something and ... and ... and ... and ...". This reads like a laundry list and not like a story. The use of all-caps is sloppy as is the use of swear words. Content: The relationship between the MC and his first queen is directly taken from Japanese anime/manga" one-san trope. This is cringy and completely unzerg-like. This is completely breaks the story flow. The acquisition of Sith powers is completely unrealistic, Jedi and Sith are training for years in the force and the MC doesn't do anything at all to get them. Advice: Author mentions in chapter 3 that he doesn't do any planning and has no editor. Even without editor please don't publish your story before re-reading it. After writing a chapter, take a break, re-read what you wrote the next day and publish only then. Regarding planning, you need to at least have consistent change of perspective, way of addressing each other and personality, consistency with original world (Zerg attitude, Force training). Also if you don't have some ideas of character development you will paint yourself in the corner.