Review Detail of _Eisen_ in Married to the Queen of Darkness

I was intrigued by the premise, but, eh, delivery was kinda weak. It's clear that the author isn't too well versed in English at least in the early chapters. Hopefully writing this helped them get better. The flow is actually pretty good, but the 'conversational' tone the... narrator? takes is mildly annoying. It feels like it's trying to be funny/clever too hard, but ends up awkward. The characters feel a bit artificial, as if they are defined by a trope or cliche that is stuck to their forehead. I'm not saying that you won't find people like them in reality, but they feel like those homeschooled kids that can't read the mood. All in all, it's obvious that it's a beginner work and if you're fine with that then the premise shows a lot of promise. If there's ever a rewritten version of this that cleans things up, I'll give it another shot.