Review Detail of AlluckStark in Mom,I got lost in a magical world

I do not speak English nor is this native language, and besides knowing that it is important for me to learn this 'wonderful' language that is English, I still don't have the slightest desire to learn it, so please stop talk about written language, because I do not write even in my navite language(Pt-BR>I from Brazil), much less in English that I do not master ... And do not forget, this is literally my first story of my life of 20 years, so if you do not want help, at least it does not disturb. I would like to hear (read) constructive (and even creative) options. I am making this story by doing, not that I am committed and everything, so do not wait too long. Ah ... And before I forget, I'm using google translator on all texts, including what you're reading hahaha Sincerely yours, your forgotten writer;)