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2020-07-01 09:18

This is sooo good. I really enjoyed this. I really recommend this book. I love this story plot and the characters as well. I really recommend. 😊

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first of all, w t f why is the whole novel ducking locked, even the duxking first chapter is locked. ok to start off, the plot is basically about this 17 year old prince (that acts like 12-14 years old kid) who was condemned for killing the “goddess” (or his mom from birth) and i think banished from his kingdom. then this guy called Iztal Juya and his brothers were told by “our goddess’ knight” (idek what that is bc they didn’t explain it from the first chapter) to train the prince some self defense stuff to protect himself. they said it was because there’d soon be a “march towards the south” (i think they meant they’re going to go to war [maybe they’re with a kingdom called Hwen, but they never mention that it’s located in the south and that’s the only kingdom they mention]). Um and then present day, they’re already on the march thingy and Juya is feeling kinda lusty for little price here. uh yeah that’s all i got from the beginning... -REVIEW- while reading. the first chapter, i was really confused. the whole chapter is filled with run on sentences (especially the [technically] second paragraph). in addition it switched from 3rd person view to 1st person view like it was nobody’s business. and usually when novels make a big boo boo like that, it’ll also have bad writing (or maybe translation? idgaf). they suck at describing the scenery too. they should’ve just crossed off the parts where they’re trying to describe a building. i would better have understood “oh the sky is blue... sky blue.” um the good parts... idk. the author wrote a decent amount of stuff in one chapter... the structure of the chapter was a$$ and the plot is kinda bland. Usually, BL is cute, but i don’t really care about the “forgotten prince” or about his “mentor”... for the people who are rlly sensitive, imma break the first chapter into two parts: the beginning and the introduction to Iztal Juya to show why i gave this novel 1 stars :) -BEGINNING- i don’t know why they start with this confusing paragraph at the very beginning, it doesn’t even catch my attention, it just makes me disinterested in reading the novel. then what’s even worse, they introduce the 2nd protagonist first in 3RD PERSON VIEW (ok remember that). then on the next paragraph, you see, “Soon, [they’re] going to war in that direction.” o m g please try to at least be a tad bit detailed to the readers... then after another paragraph, it seems like Juya is talking... talking to us... in 1st person... i literally looked at my phone for like 30 minutes to figure out why the rest of the chapter just felt so off... later on, the prince guy starts talking about how a$$ this kingdom called Hwen and how evil they are for enslaving the poor. my favorite line from this chapter thou is when the prince guy says “Apparently, the situation is very dire.” honey, obviously they’re in a dire situation. then blah blah blah, some boring parts and some grammar issues, then Juya pops outta know where and is admiring the prince while he’s taking about how mean the Hwen kingdom is. Tbh, Juya is a ducking savage. Later on, the prince guy, obviously not thinking they’re going to the south, says something like “oh if we do go to the south, let’s uh fix Hwen, ok sensei? ok goodie.” Yeah that’s basically the beginning of the first chapter... -INTRODUCTION TO ML- I hate how they transitioned to the prince’s and Juya’s conversation together to “oh yeah this is my background story”. So basically, Juya has a tiny cult with his brothers called “The Innocent Ones” and they always listen to papa “goddess warrior” to go to heaven. then blah blah blah, lame backstory, blah blah blah, some grammar issues again, then he talks about how they have “complete control of their mind and body”. nothing strange about that... till he’s over here contradicting himself saying... (PART 2 IN COMMENTS BC I CANT FIT MY REVIEW ;-;)

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