Review Detail of Jeysss in Emperor NPC

Although my reading status is only chapter 1 (maybe because I backread some chapters), I read up till chapter 4 to write the review. I'll be reading more though so watch out :)

You've got some great points here, your most important criticisms are accurate, so don't sell your review too short. We only get better by constant practice, and the best practice is repetition. This'll be some practice for me at a critical response. Your criticisms, for the most part, are about matters of style. For instance, I don't have an omniscient narrator, I have a narrator that speaks from the lead character's perspective. Whenever the Demon Emperor (later, Zenos) is the focus of the scene, the narrator only remarks on things he sees or things he could possibly know. It's similar for Akaron, or for Amy, the Heroine. A perspective shift only ever comes with a chapter change, so you will never see a flip inside the chapter. The first volume is written in such a way as to take in many different perspectives at once, from many different characters, in several different timelines... all of them relevant to the same event. In that way, I know it can be confusing, and I know my art suffers for my stubbornness, but I believe strongly in opening in that style. Volume 2 is written to a completely different beat, where almost all of the chapters focus on the main character, Zenos, with a few flashbacks. It's something I think you and most readers would enjoy more, but it's hollow without the context and chaos of Volume 1. Paradise and peace must be made from pain and trouble, I think. Yes, characters die. The fact that they die quickly, before the reader can know them, is a reflection of the Demon Emperor's own sadness, which is borne out throughout the end of the first volume and into the second. He loved Akaron, or perhaps--more accurately--he wanted to love him as a son, but he could not. Akaron's quick introduction and passing echoes the Demon Emperor's fleeting, passing purpose, as he stands once for the first time to live in his world, only to die along with everyone and everything else. Perhaps, I open my novel with a star exploding. I don't provide any time to learn about the star, except to show its cataclysmic super nova, and with its destruction readers are left without anything to cling to. However, by volume 1's end, Zenos appears, and the stardust coalesces again under his gravity. Afterwards, the deaths that follow can be referenced with him in mind, as the character most will be attached to. I think that's definitely a weakness in my novel, but it's a style I chose intentionally. Sometimes we authors must practice, and sometimes--most rarely--we must be brave to experiment when we're confident in our skills. That's a benefit of experience you'll someday enjoy. There's something different about my art than the art of most authors on webnovel, and you've given me a chance to chat about it, so thank you. My crude philosophy can be summarized as, "it's not about you, it's about everyone." I have never felt comfortable with a single perspective on a hero, because there is no true good or evil in the world, just events that some will label cruel or righteous. That said, I don't feel comfortable with two, or even three perspectives. I want dozens, as many as I can reasonably fit. In a typical party-style adventure, the hero is surrounded by his companions, and sometimes they might get a scene or they might offer their thoughts. In my story, each of the companions will be worthy of a main character themselves, fully realized, rational, and believable. The 'villains' or antagonists, though I'm loathe to call them such, will not merely have motivations or desires, but loves. They will have their own worlds, their own agendas, rendered by their allies, projected in their causes, that will make them almost likeable, if not sympathetic. I think I've digressed, and I've said enough already, but I'll add one more thing. "How does one create a meaningful life, when life itself has no meaning?" is a ridiculous question, but in a universe where mankind is extinct, and only AIs in their likeness remain, it's one the characters have to ask. In Emperor NPC, you are not born, you are made. You are not free, you are a slave. The things you think you enjoy, the world you think you live in, is not real. You're just a process in a computer's dream--a number-value--and part of an equation you cannot possibly comprehend. That sounds a lot like living as a human on Earth, doesn't it? We're all searching for meaning in our lives. That great quest defines my novel. It's not something that's obvious immediately, or even soon, but it becomes more clear with every character that tells their story. Bit by bit, the artwork that I paint is revealed, an enormous canvas that cannot be appreciated until its final moment. Thank you for taking the time to review, and I hope if you take anything from this, it's that if you choose the author's path and choose to develop your art, it's that you be bold. Write bravely, write madly, and answer the questions YOU hold in your heart. Even if only 10% of your readers understand, that's a success. Even if only 1% make it to the end, that's okay. If you create a story that will effect someone's point of view for the rest of their life, then you've done something truly incredible. But, of course, this often doesn't work if you want to earn money. Hahahaha!