Review Detail of Shiro_MSFA in Emross Empire : War And Order (Eng-V.)

because someone asked and corrected my novel, so I made this statement. I have fixed the synopsis, hopefully it will be easier to understand. let me tell you a little plot. so actually there are two story lines, from 2 different novels. one is EEWAO and another is New World which I haven't published yet. the stories of the two novels are interconnected and when EEWAO is finished I will publish New World novel that I myself feel is very very good, because there are lessons in history, culture and so on from all over the world. I created EEWAO to remember my game friends and improve the quality of my writing before I published New World. so I hope when I make New World, the quality will be better. btw I am still learning to write, so your review is very useful for me.