Review Detail of dukroger in Saving The Future
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We have a MC who suffered the pain of being dematerialized in his death and then endured more than two billion years of disputes where his soul and mind were strengthened, and then we are presented with the character of Juno, basically a crutch for when the MC needs and that he received knowledge about the powers of the MC and of human history, things that obviously the MC himself could have received directly, or is that what we learned from all this? that we have a strong MC that the author is making it weaker for us to push our throat into a valid reason for the existence of Juno, his future romantic partner, and that is simply a drug !!! this is making history lose a lot of quality sincerely !! sad to see such a good story lose potential as a result of such nonsense !!! Besides, the story is very good and well worked in general.
Saving The Future
MisterImmortal
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Thank dude for not straight up giving 1 star. This was my first novel so I had no idea how to write character or how to make them likable while still being a bit annoying. Sadly Juno's character became too annoying. Still, thanks for giving this a chance. Though I should warn you that the novel is not 100% complete. I've Posted a very long chapter at the end with all the outline I had planned with an ending.
I understand, the thematic of the history and development of the world so far is cool, I see that you friend author did a nice research before writing your story and this is important, but as you said, the character Juno just doesn't suit that, it's like you have wonderful food but every life you eat a little sometimes comes a piece of stone inside or something that chokes in your throat, if it really was necessary to put an assistant I repeat a personality suggestion, it should be something like jarvys, just look at the iron man movies, the vast majority love jarvys, he always tries to be useful and charismatic, it would be perfectly possible to see a character like that becoming mc's best friend or something, and as you said no we can see this happening to Juno because she is just annoying as hell! I do not doubt anything that many people started to read his story and gave up simply because he could not bear to read something with a character like her, so much so that the best chapters are the ones that she doesn’t even appear or even mention because sometimes she only hears about Juno himself that she doesn't say anything it just irritates us to make her think about it. So my sincere recommendation, make an edit from the beginning of the story and exchange Juno for a character like I suggested or something like that or even totally remove the figure of a being like her from the story where all powers and knowledge would be given directly to the MC and in times of pain instead of making him need her help to endure it was enough to show that he would develop strength alone for that without needing any moleta to get up and walk because honestly it is what she looks like a crutch to help the mc that the it makes it seem weaker and that outside it only serves to irritate the MC himself and those who read the story.