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Kannan768
Kannan768Lv34yr
2020-07-20 07:14

This will be pretty long, sorry in advance. I want to start by saying how much I love this story, however even the best book can have problems. So here’s my two cents on the matter. The start is interesting and had me thinking the same as the main character for awhile. It picks up really quickly and gets seriously interesting after he decides to set out alone, but around chapter 40-50ish there is a lot of over used gags, unlikeable characters and useless plot threads. Though these clear up around chapter 80 it still had moments that made me think certain characters would make other appearances rather than just be one offs. Of The two who survived the MC’s first encounter with people after gaining his new cultivation technique, only one is relevant and is soon forgotten entirely. The couple who told the MC about how humans wear clothes are told to say MC’s name if they are ever in need, but that never comes up again. I could go on, because this never really changes. There are at least a dozen characters I thought would stick around, or be important later only to have been sidelined completely. Hell even the main cast gets a complete overhaul at one point. It’s done very well, but still sucks that we won’t see certain characters for afew hundred chapters. It’s true that as one cultivates one can live for hundreds of thousands of years, so all these characters might reappear eventually. But doesn’t make me feel any better knowing it’s only a possibility. There is a lot that’s hyped up and then just forgotten right after. Like the Spiritas. While it was my mistake to treat them like energy beings and not like elvish humanoids, I still felt disappointed that we didn’t see anything from them despite the way they were hyped. That being said, afew more humanoid races wouldn’t hurt. Humans are one thing. And demon beast are incredibly varied, but other life forms that have colonized their worlds and expanded across the Many universes could add a lot to the story. Instead of just having everyone be either human, or demon beast in human form. As the story goes on this kind of thing only becomes more apparent. But the story does improve constantly. After taking advice from the fans the story only got better. Especially with character development and world building. Even the grammar and punctuation improved. For awhile it wasn’t easy to read certain lines, but this is corrected, though not perfect, it’s still easy to understand and has only afew small mistakes. After certain annoying characters start to turn around for the better and the repeated jokes come to a halt the story improves drastically. But if your not into romance and expect nothing from the MC be prepared, because, while the romance doesn’t appear till afew hundred chapters in, once it does it will always be there and constantly expand as new couples form and more and more hybrid children are created. The underdog concept the MC has from being a wisp is basically nonexistent. You can’t call him an underdog in any sense of the word. He is a literal genius at everything he does. The story makes that apparent really quick too. Even at the first realm of cultivation the MC is remarkably more powerful and skilled in almost every way than the cultivators and demon beasts around him. And this continues throughout the story and is one of his defining traits. He is an OP blacksmith, alchemist and technically a puppet master aswell. He barely needs to try for most of what he does and things often fall into his lap without much strenuous effort. This is either because of the MC’s personality and the effects from decisions and choices made by the MC and his crew, or because there’s a powerful being pulling strings behind the scenes. Either way he is the centre of attention. Much to his annoyance since he hates to bring unwanted gazes, but seems not to realize how seriously amazing he is compared to everyone else. He isn’t humble at all but doesn’t come off too overconfident all the time. Sometimes his personality is annoying though. Like when he treats two enemies like fodder and talks as if they aren’t even there. Or when he casually says how he too wields a special type of law and is in the advanced stage, while said person in in the initial stage. Making her feel less special and pathetic compared to him. He does that kind of thing a lot with his friends. Showing them up without realizing it and complaining when they call him out, or acting as if he doesn’t understand. And one of the best concepts I found interesting at the start was the Wisps short lifespan, i was really curious how the writer would balance the MC’s struggle as he found his friends surpassing him in cultivation and his lifespan coming to an end, him finding the limits of his race and needing to push beyond, but that is literally not even close to a problem for the MC. I mean seriously every wisp ever born has worried about their lifespan and the MC logically assumes he’ll need to worry when he reaches a higher level, so he makes preparations. Getting a long dead wisps technique to ensure he can make a breakthrough to extend his lifespan before it runs out. Only it isn’t needed and goes almost forgotten for hundreds of chapters. I love a lot of the stuff in this story, but it’s annoying to think of people like the MC in the real world. No matter how hard you try, if you don’t have talent you’ll only get so far. And if you meet someone overflowing with talent who works just as hard, then what was the point of trying in the first place. For every step a normal person makes the MC makes three more and then looks back and takes another step just for the sake of proving how amazing he is. I like how he helps his friends and doesn’t take pleasure in killing. His choice of equipment reflects this and Fits very well. But He just seems TOO PERFECT. Annoyingly so at times. The main characters elemental control is basically godlike and helps in everything he does. Whether it’s helping his friends improve their own elemental control, or engaging in Combat and cultivation. Even things like blacksmithing, alchemy, formations and ‘puppetry‘ are all dominated by the MC. This isn’t really that big of a problem just something I noticed and thought was weird. It does suck that his elemental control isn’t used to its fullest though . Since the writer likes to use the same few attacks over and over. I love the way these attacks have developed and evolved over the course of the story, but it seriously limits what could be done. The MC will always have an elemental advantage against any opponent of the same realm and even against ones in higher realms to an extent. Yet this power is rarely used The way it could be. With all the elements the MC should have a massive arsenal of unique elemental fusions and skills that make the most of his level of control, but the same few techniques get used over and over. He should use the best elements for each adversary, not just spam whatever’s convenient. So many techniques have been forgotten or just go unused. After every fight the MC should either develop a new technique or use the techniques of his past opponents to constantly improve his skills. Especially since he can see a technique once and replicate it with ease. The side characters are fleshed out pretty well and done properly, but some of them just feel like they exist and don’t really contribute to the plot in any way shape or form. The MC also has knowledge of countless languages and strives to learn them all, but this is only really mentioned or relevant once. The MC also has a master that barley does master like things and this transmits into the MC who has his own disciple, but only really guides his protégée occasionally. It feels less like a master, disciple relationship and more like a student, teacher one from school. Say some stuff, show some stuff and have them do it themselves before you test them. Instead of spending time guiding and aiding personally and slowly, like a master should. Instead they leave everything up to their disciples. I get that a sense of individuality is Needed and they can’t baby them, but I expected alittle more. Overall a great story with a lot of room to grow. If I were the writer I would make the MC hit a wall during his cultivation. A wall larger and harder than anyone around him. That way the struggle would return and it wouldn’t feel like cultivation was so easy. It’s supposed to be going against the heavens after all, so it shouldn’t be a walk in the park. Not that it has been completely easy for the MC and his group. It just feels they face less adversity than others while progressing faster and growing all around more powerful. I’ve never liked the concept in any story of someone only being afew decades old and being able to hold their own against someone who has lived for hundreds, even thousands of years. When stories do that kind of thing, it ruins the enjoyment for me. So I hope the MC doesn’t continue growing exponentially faster and stronger than everyone else around him. Again sorry for the Long review. I just had a lot to say. I’ve been reading this from long before it went premium, so I hope it continues to improve and thank you for writing such an interesting novel. If you’ve read this far thank you. I would have put more of why I enjoy this series, but I feel it was covered in most of the other reviews.

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Professor_Zzyzx
Professor_ZzyzxLv3

While I never Liked when the MC got beaten unjustly, I always liked Yusa’s character. I’m not too surprised so many people don’t, but still this I like the fifth review that has some kind of gripe with her. Though it’s also the first that says how she changed and how the characters improved.

GangikaKing
GangikaKingLv10

I completely agree with the humanoid races thought. Demon beasts and humans shouldn’t be the only ones. Have you ever read Chrysalis? The dungeon monsters in that story are very similar to demon beast, but there are also the Karmodo (lizard like people), the Sophos (moloid like individuals who speak with their minds), and the Golgari (7-8 foot tall stone skinned people).

Suiyan
SuiyanAuthor

Now... that's what I call a review. '-' (Never done one this big, though. =X)

TheFallenOne
TheFallenOneLv5

can i ask...what happened with that wang girl..and did her mark cause trouble?

Professor_Zzyzx
Professor_ZzyzxLv3

No it didn’t. Spoiler obviously. They get married. The mark is just her clans way of choosing her husband. So that no matter how far they are from each other, they’re still connected. It doesn’t have any other effects. Their relationship is honestly really adorable.

TheFallenOne:can i ask...what happened with that wang girl..and did her mark cause trouble?
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Suiyan
SuiyanAuthor

Hi guys, this is the very first chapter, and I would like to make some things clear. 1- There will be romance? Well, a little, but I'm not a romanticist. Hence, this will take place 'SUPER FU***NG LATE' in the story. So don't worry about Feifei for now. She isn't the main point here, Krune's life as a wisp is. 2- If you haven't noticed the spaceship yet, you better know that this is a novel where technology exists. Still, it is mostly used for convenience. It takes almost no part in the cultivators' strength, so don't expect super mechas or spiritual armors or whatever. Think about this universe as if our nowadays technology meets the ancient cultivation world and they just get well together. It also helps to create a lot of funny events, so... 3- The first 20 chapters or so doesn't picture it well. Still, like a wisp, Krune only has the little knowledge that he learned in the forest and by secretly visiting the nearby villages. He knows about the technological world but had barely involved himself with it before leaving the Katiu Forest. 4- As a nonhuman, Krune has no EQ when considering the humans' culture and habits. It is definitely one of the top trends of this novel, so you can expect a lot of 'smashing my face against the common sense wall' after chapter 20 more or less. 5- Will there be harem in this novel? No, there won't be any, be it Krune or any other character in the entire story. 'Sorry, Mario, but your princess is in another castle.' I'm the type of person that can't accept a world where a man having several wives is okay. Still, a woman having more than one man is considered a betrayal, this is BS! I have no problem with novels where both genres have the same rights, though. 6-The book is now passing through a re-edition. The story won't change anywhere, just the grammar will be fixed. You will notice that the grammar will turn bad at some point, and then it will come back to normal after chapter 100. Thanks to my editor for all the work on the existing chapters so far. o/

AlienTurkey9958
AlienTurkey9958Lv11

The quality of the writing is over all alright there are a few spelling mistakes here and there but nothing that can't be over looked. The stability of the updates is pretty consistent so not much to complain about. The real downfall of this story is the characters and their development, and by development I mean the lack of it. The characters frankly are boring and very 2d most of their personalities can be described with a few words such as, mean and money hungry, talented and ignorant, genius and quiet, and for Ao he has nothing other than being the only other guy in the story. The story development is also very bad it is mostly the same over used jokes and the protagonist getting bullied by his so called friends. The Mc is supposed to be smart but then makes the same mistakes over and over again, and then it is just labeled as a joke. The one thing that makes the Mc unique, other than his race, is almost instantly given to his friends and they are only slightly slower than the "genius" mc. This story had so much potential, and I really enjoyed it at the stat but then the repetition of the same thing made the story get old real quick. As a suggestion to the author pleased do not keep forcing the same jokes, build on the characters more, give something to make the mc unique again, other than his race, allow the mc to grow and learn from his mistakes instead of repeating them. These are just a few things that could be done to improve the over story. Once again I love the concept of the story and the beginning was great, it just never let the characters to be built cause it to get boring really quickly.

Tortul
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