Broken English and grammar, cartoony characters and absolutely no legitimate plot; the story is just not really worth the time. MC is in the role of "lul i could own this world if i wanted, but i don't, except, you know, i do, but i want a handicap, so watch me walk through the world blindfolded with my hands tied behind my back as i let people insult and spit on me where ever i go." which just never goes well for anyone involved. Either make him all powerful and all knowing as you intended at the start or have him actually face danger, interesting plots and put him in a position to work for it. What you've done is remove all sense of conflict and tensíon right at the beginning of your story and then keep throwing various problems at him and force him to be pathetic in order to not show himself and fake tensíon, and it's just not fun to read. You can't have your cake and eat it too. And, honestly, for someone on his 700th reincarnation, he is just ridiculously childish, but I suppose that reflects more on you as the writer.
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LIKEYeah sure a smut novel is mostly about the lemon scenes, but why would you read that if you need to read about a **** mc that gets shat on by everyone (not read it, but from the OP that's what it sounds like).
Ero_Usagi:You know... From the title we can already expect more smut less plot. So why did you whine? Search other books with fantasy aspect as the main things dont talk rubbish on smut novel.
Well this just shows how little patience people like you have, if you actually spent a little of brain power to read more that a couple of chapters you could have understood the reasons for what was happening in the early chapters, you missed the whole explanation that was literally at the beginning of the story, in the first 2/3 chapters, so I doubt you even read it, I hope people don't take reviews lime your too seriously
RobertBoss:Yeah sure a smut novel is mostly about the lemon scenes, but why would you read that if you need to read about a **** mc that gets shat on by everyone (not read it, but from the OP that's what it sounds like).
Stfu if u know nothing, what do you want? All protagonist should start from weak to strong? There are a lot of novels that got a protagonist like that so why don't you read them right now and acting like "No I don't like it cause the Mc is already strong, author is dumb!" (AA! write ur own novel!) In fact, MC is so strong however, he still got an enormous weakness, and that is to protect the women by his side and trying his best to have them a smooth sailing to become stronger, but an immortal is targeting him or even countless of that kind will target him in the future and trying its best to find his weakness. Isn't that already a unique plotthat your cage mind can't realise? If you want plot that mostly all the novels have. Why are you here?
Slurp_King:Stfu if u know nothing, what do you want? All protagonist should start from weak to strong? There are a lot of novels that got a protagonist like that so why don't you read them right now and acting like "No I don't like it cause the Mc is already strong, author is dumb!" (AA! write ur own novel!) In fact, MC is so strong however, he still got an enormous weakness, and that is to protect the women by his side and trying his best to have them a smooth sailing to become stronger, but an immortal is targeting him or even countless of that kind will target him in the future and trying its best to find his weakness. Isn't that already a unique plotthat your cage mind can't realise? If you want plot that mostly all the novels have. Why are you here?
First Point: He never said that he had a problem with the Mc being strong. He simply was annoyed that the MC was strong but still had people walk over him and insult him. He wanted the author to have a mc with a clear power level. Either weak (has reason for people to walk over him since he’s weak, he can grow) or strong (doesn’t have people walk over him, is strong but really can’t grow). Second Point: Since he’s put a relatively bad review, he’s probably already moved onto another book. Even if he has moved on, his review should stay because it will warn other people of elements about the story they might dislike. Bad reviews also add a sense of authenticity to a book amongst a sea of 5 star reviews. Third Point: He doesn’t need to write a book to know a book is distasteful. Most of the audience for a writer are people who in fact don’t know how to write. You might argue that since most people left 5 star reviews, majority wins and his argument is pointless but you have to remember that reading is a leisure activity. When people read they tend to go off into a realm of imagination where they don’t take things as seriously as normal life. They usually skim over some issues or don’t notice them at all. Finally, it’s best not to swear in a comment, review or reply. If you do it tells others that you are angry. People understand that angry people cannot think properly than a normal calm person. That way, you will lose support and eventually the argument. Also I’m not trying to start a fight with you, I’m just clearing up his points for you.
Slurp_King:Stfu if u know nothing, what do you want? All protagonist should start from weak to strong? There are a lot of novels that got a protagonist like that so why don't you read them right now and acting like "No I don't like it cause the Mc is already strong, author is dumb!" (AA! write ur own novel!) In fact, MC is so strong however, he still got an enormous weakness, and that is to protect the women by his side and trying his best to have them a smooth sailing to become stronger, but an immortal is targeting him or even countless of that kind will target him in the future and trying its best to find his weakness. Isn't that already a unique plotthat your cage mind can't realise? If you want plot that mostly all the novels have. Why are you here?
You know MC is over 700 and OP but I think you didn't exactly understood the reason he allows people to "spit"(later it stops and everyone gets face slapped) on him. So I will try to explain how I understand this: -the MC is over 200k years old so he really doesn't care (would you be angryif some child told you are stupid?) -the life of such immortal is boring (one of the reasons for handicaps). He can own the world in seconds but so what? Will there be any fun? Won't everyone fear him even close ones?He chose life of debauchery but you know just f*cking without any feelings and "romance" (though MC indeed manipulates sometimes) would be boring. -later the plot start feeling better since immortal enemies appear -In the first few chapters MC explained why he didn't show his power of immortal (though his sword expertise can be counted as a part of strength) from the start - he got god/messiah complex in his early reincarnation and wanted to stop it (at that time he didn't about immortals too) so he set up this rule to not use this power until *****hood. Though I like this book i would give it 4/4,5 stars since it is one of the better original novels (at least those I seen). As for grammar and english it gets better in newer chapters.
AndromedaAirlines:You've got to be one of the legitimately dumbest people I've encountered in a while.
Sorry, If only he could write his review the same method what you wrote rn, I could hav understand him but he wrote it in infuriating way that's why I lost it, it's like naofumi being falsely accused as a raper, with that not only its detrimental to the novel but also the readers who actually might like the novel will not even read chapter 1 jsut because of his underrated review anyway once again, I just lost, I could think properly, he has the right to review that way if that what he feels. I usually don't comment in any reviews but it just kinda really like the novel and admired how the author can manage the harem with so many girls without neglecting any of them(yet). Anyway, thanks for ur reply, I understand.
P1zaBox:First Point: He never said that he had a problem with the Mc being strong. He simply was annoyed that the MC was strong but still had people walk over him and insult him. He wanted the author to have a mc with a clear power level. Either weak (has reason for people to walk over him since he’s weak, he can grow) or strong (doesn’t have people walk over him, is strong but really can’t grow). Second Point: Since he’s put a relatively bad review, he’s probably already moved onto another book. Even if he has moved on, his review should stay because it will warn other people of elements about the story they might dislike. Bad reviews also add a sense of authenticity to a book amongst a sea of 5 star reviews. Third Point: He doesn’t need to write a book to know a book is distasteful. Most of the audience for a writer are people who in fact don’t know how to write. You might argue that since most people left 5 star reviews, majority wins and his argument is pointless but you have to remember that reading is a leisure activity. When people read they tend to go off into a realm of imagination where they don’t take things as seriously as normal life. They usually skim over some issues or don’t notice them at all. Finally, it’s best not to swear in a comment, review or reply. If you do it tells others that you are angry. People understand that angry people cannot think properly than a normal calm person. That way, you will lose support and eventually the argument. Also I’m not trying to start a fight with you, I’m just clearing up his points for you.
It’s all good dude. I can see how you got angry over his review, i probably would have gotten angry had i not chosen a neutral position. Still if you do get angry in the future, best to calm down, think logically and write a good argument or counterargument. Stay safe!
Slurp_King:Sorry, If only he could write his review the same method what you wrote rn, I could hav understand him but he wrote it in infuriating way that's why I lost it, it's like naofumi being falsely accused as a raper, with that not only its detrimental to the novel but also the readers who actually might like the novel will not even read chapter 1 jsut because of his underrated review anyway once again, I just lost, I could think properly, he has the right to review that way if that what he feels. I usually don't comment in any reviews but it just kinda really like the novel and admired how the author can manage the harem with so many girls without neglecting any of them(yet). Anyway, thanks for ur reply, I understand.
Well i didn't read this book for a few months and it just stuck at my library because of his bad review until I got nothing to read and I thought I try it a shot and I found gold
Slurp_King:Sorry, If only he could write his review the same method what you wrote rn, I could hav understand him but he wrote it in infuriating way that's why I lost it, it's like naofumi being falsely accused as a raper, with that not only its detrimental to the novel but also the readers who actually might like the novel will not even read chapter 1 jsut because of his underrated review anyway once again, I just lost, I could think properly, he has the right to review that way if that what he feels. I usually don't comment in any reviews but it just kinda really like the novel and admired how the author can manage the harem with so many girls without neglecting any of them(yet). Anyway, thanks for ur reply, I understand.
Konrad_The_Fourth:Well i didn't read this book for a few months and it just stuck at my library because of his bad review until I got nothing to read and I thought I try it a shot and I found gold
Slurp_King:Stfu if u know nothing, what do you want? All protagonist should start from weak to strong? There are a lot of novels that got a protagonist like that so why don't you read them right now and acting like "No I don't like it cause the Mc is already strong, author is dumb!" (AA! write ur own novel!) In fact, MC is so strong however, he still got an enormous weakness, and that is to protect the women by his side and trying his best to have them a smooth sailing to become stronger, but an immortal is targeting him or even countless of that kind will target him in the future and trying its best to find his weakness. Isn't that already a unique plotthat your cage mind can't realise? If you want plot that mostly all the novels have. Why are you here?