Review Detail of Loyalscum in The Reincarnation of The Crimson Vampire

The way you wrote your first chapter does not read off like a prologue when i read it it felt more like someone telling a beadtime story to a little kid which would have been a way better opener if that was what you were going for but you obviously weren't so i suggest you remove all the personal statements were its like he is second guessing what did and did not happen. In a prologue your suppose to be sure about these things if the prologue is traditionaly write that is. Also you have a lot of grammar errors all over your story. Fix those and you will be good. This is a review swap so check out my book my MC is evil so if you like the dark side read it. Its called unusual world https://***.webnovel.com/book/15094015305771305/Unusual-world