Review Detail of SSBGoditz in New Age of Glory The King's Avatar Fan-fic

There are frequent grammar mistakes and tense changes, but not so much that it detracts from the writing. The prose itself seemed a bit dull and boring. There was nothing that drew me in, and I had to force myself to read the 1st (2nd) chapter. I found the prologue unnecessary, though I guess it served as a sort of buffer between the source and this fanfic. POV is sometimes messed up, and a general lack of description and sensory detail meant the world (if I can even call it a world) lacked depth, uniqueness and a lived-in feel. All in all, events seemed to happen for the sake of happening, with not much emphasis placed on the importance of said events for the POV character. A focus on telling events also led to a lack of description. Characters... I can't say much, except that the one character introduced thus far seemed rather dull. As for world design, the novel seems to want to focus on the in-game Glory world (evident in the introduction of VR) but again, the overuse of 'telling' meant it fell short. Overall rating is 3.2.