Review Detail of Arkinslize in The Adventures of Treasure Hunters - 1 season

My review is only concerning the 1st chapter. The premise is good, you know your stuff. I wouldn't be able to point incoherences as i know nothing about the things you wrote. I will read a bit more tomorrow to sed how it turns out. I would maybe advice you to be careful with info dumps as it could bore some readers. I have the same issue and i think it is necessary to find a balance. Indeee, your main problem is grammar. You did your best, i can see it, but some sentences have serious problems. I could show you some examples on discord if you wish. Most grammar mistakes aren't an issue, but some sentences' syntax affect the undersdanting and the flow. The free version of Grammarly is enough to fix many of your mistakes and wrong word usage. An astuce i use to avoid some mistakes: Writing my sentences with quotation marks on Google. If there is no answer, there is probably a mistake somewhere.