Review Detail of holson_Charles in Lust, Power, & Desire [R-18+]
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well first time i have stopped reading an R-18 novel in the third chapter, this is a weird novel and the way i see it, the weirdness is just starting. and i am not gonna be here to find out.. got 3.6 star only because the writing quality, grammar was okay no major errors.
Lust, Power, & Desire [R-18+]
LordSputnik
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mind you even though i said i stop in third chapter i went aall the way to probably chapter 7 but the way i see this novel going is probably going to be a really weird one cause i think later on he is probably gonna be fucking with them too but god blessed his soul, they go **** this guy, suck this other guy, raped this other random weapon, charmed this random bad guy and suck him dry, probably go to enemy camp act like they some good girl to get rape by whole enemy camp and killing them in the process, and after all this **** go sleep by the side of mc like its nothing , controlling him, making him think he important in their **** feast. , this is all the outcome i see coming in future plot just reading 7 chapter, i am not into the using sex as a weapon type story.. that's just me though.. keep doing your thing i think a lot people enjoy this type of thing.
LordSputnik:Appreciate the feedback! What weirded you out though if I might ask. If you're talking about Chapter 4, then I kinda get it as that chapter is probably the weirdest one out of all of them. (If it gets enough weird feedback I'll probably change it and then keep the original as an auxiliary chapter)
i just got to chapter 18 and how right was i.. they literally having sex with everybody. so author whats the point of this story? all i see is them fucking all the mc knights and enemies...
LordSputnik:Appreciate the feedback! What weirded you out though if I might ask. If you're talking about Chapter 4, then I kinda get it as that chapter is probably the weirdest one out of all of them. (If it gets enough weird feedback I'll probably change it and then keep the original as an auxiliary chapter)
The purpose is the rise and fall of Count Agist. Lillica only sleeps with one person (Morgan). Lorraina does sleep with 4: Nicholas, Thomas, a random maid, and Lord Hawthorne and the only enemy was Lord Hawthorne, although 5 could be assumed from the nameless one in the 2nd chapter that has no relevance to anything. The two demonesses aren't even present in the short Lord Alfreed arc. As for sleeping with a bunch of knights at once, the closest they've came to that is Lorraina sleeping with Thomas and Nicholas at the same time. (Which was done to get them to start working together for once) If that part isn't clear though I'll try and be a little more direct with the reasons for their actions. The main problem is I understand what's going on since I wrote it, so I need more feedback like this so I can see if other people get it too. I'm not trying to defend my story or say your perception is incorrect, I just want to make sure that as many people as possible perceive it as intended after reading it and that is my fault as a writer.
holson_Charles:i just got to chapter 18 and how right was i.. they literally having sex with everybody. so author whats the point of this story? all i see is them fucking all the mc knights and enemies...
So the mc is not gonna have any relationship with them or even have feeling for them? So they r just doing their own thing while helping mc that’s it? Cause if he does get into a relationship with them or even have sex with them that will be really disturbing to me. Sharing woman between the bro..
LordSputnik:The purpose is the rise and fall of Count Agist. Lillica only sleeps with one person (Morgan). Lorraina does sleep with 4: Nicholas, Thomas, a random maid, and Lord Hawthorne and the only enemy was Lord Hawthorne, although 5 could be assumed from the nameless one in the 2nd chapter that has no relevance to anything. The two demonesses aren't even present in the short Lord Alfreed arc. As for sleeping with a bunch of knights at once, the closest they've came to that is Lorraina sleeping with Thomas and Nicholas at the same time. (Which was done to get them to start working together for once) If that part isn't clear though I'll try and be a little more direct with the reasons for their actions. The main problem is I understand what's going on since I wrote it, so I need more feedback like this so I can see if other people get it too. I'm not trying to defend my story or say your perception is incorrect, I just want to make sure that as many people as possible perceive it as intended after reading it and that is my fault as a writer.
Don’t mind me bro,, I am just telling you why I can’t read your story. Cause all I see in this story is 2 supposed to be powerful demon one of them was even an ex queen can’t do nothing other than having sex. Even thing that could have been solved with a simple talk they had to resort to sex..story could have been better without this type of demon.. well my opinion..
LordSputnik:The purpose is the rise and fall of Count Agist. Lillica only sleeps with one person (Morgan). Lorraina does sleep with 4: Nicholas, Thomas, a random maid, and Lord Hawthorne and the only enemy was Lord Hawthorne, although 5 could be assumed from the nameless one in the 2nd chapter that has no relevance to anything. The two demonesses aren't even present in the short Lord Alfreed arc. As for sleeping with a bunch of knights at once, the closest they've came to that is Lorraina sleeping with Thomas and Nicholas at the same time. (Which was done to get them to start working together for once) If that part isn't clear though I'll try and be a little more direct with the reasons for their actions. The main problem is I understand what's going on since I wrote it, so I need more feedback like this so I can see if other people get it too. I'm not trying to defend my story or say your perception is incorrect, I just want to make sure that as many people as possible perceive it as intended after reading it and that is my fault as a writer.
The story will eventually be a harem, but not the harem comedy, more like a game of thrones style harem where the mistresses compete and some may or may not end up dead. (Can't say yes or no as that would be a spoiler) I probably need to make it clearer then that the demonesses hide their power to avoid attention from other demons and the church. I think I only subtly mention this so I might need to emphasize this more.
holson_Charles:Don’t mind me bro,, I am just telling you why I can’t read your story. Cause all I see in this story is 2 supposed to be powerful demon one of them was even an ex queen can’t do nothing other than having sex. Even thing that could have been solved with a simple talk they had to resort to sex..story could have been better without this type of demon.. well my opinion..
First of all thanks for answering not all author does that... as long these 2 r not part of the harem I am ok with it... I just can’t stand the fact that these 2 are fucking the MC knight like it’s ok.. if it was the enemy I wouldn’t mind as much cause after they killed them but really mc friend are fucking is future to be girlfriend.. well this push me off and I don’t see the point of it.
LordSputnik:The story will eventually be a harem, but not the harem comedy, more like a game of thrones style harem where the mistresses compete and some may or may not end up dead. (Can't say yes or no as that would be a spoiler) I probably need to make it clearer then that the demonesses hide their power to avoid attention from other demons and the church. I think I only subtly mention this so I might need to emphasize this more.
Personally, I hate all of the erotica on here where the MC steals the women from other men. Lillica had a reason though for sleeping with Morgan and she made clear that it didn't mean anything. Still, Morgan is human and in his early 20s so he still gets lovestruck. I mean, if I was 21 and inexperienced again I'd fall for the first woman that slept with me even if she said not too.
holson_Charles:First of all thanks for answering not all author does that... as long these 2 r not part of the harem I am ok with it... I just can’t stand the fact that these 2 are fucking the MC knight like it’s ok.. if it was the enemy I wouldn’t mind as much cause after they killed them but really mc friend are fucking is future to be girlfriend.. well this push me off and I don’t see the point of it.
Regardless I still don’t see the point of it if she was going to be important to mc,oh Morgan have magic issue oh let’s **** so I can suck magic out,, well not my type of novel.. the chapter where the mc kiss her made me feel bad for mc somehow.. well anyway thanks for all answer.. I just wanted to let you those two girl made me drop... bye..
LordSputnik:Personally, I hate all of the erotica on here where the MC steals the women from other men. Lillica had a reason though for sleeping with Morgan and she made clear that it didn't mean anything. Still, Morgan is human and in his early 20s so he still gets lovestruck. I mean, if I was 21 and inexperienced again I'd fall for the first woman that slept with me even if she said not too.
LordSputnik:Personally, I hate all of the erotica on here where the MC steals the women from other men. Lillica had a reason though for sleeping with Morgan and she made clear that it didn't mean anything. Still, Morgan is human and in his early 20s so he still gets lovestruck. I mean, if I was 21 and inexperienced again I'd fall for the first woman that slept with me even if she said not too.