Review Detail of BaeVida in My Secret Lovelife

Okay.... Your synopsis is good. Love how your novel began, character progressed... Its nice. Now for my review proper... Sorry if I may sound as a critique but I am not. Only giving a few pointers to make your book great. First of, your paragraphs are long, try shortening them. I was like u in dat regard but writer's gave their honest review that it may bore a reader n stuff. 2ndly, you should really space it out when they talk. Like a paragraph or new line for what this person is saying. Because you end up mixing parenthesis. Some readers may find it disturbing. U may have changed these in later chapters but if u can change it in earlier chapters den gud. 3rdly, u do not need to spell out evrytime, I said and he said. Wen it is a 2 person conversation, u really don't need that much. It wen they are mire, you may put those more so the readers can know who is talking. Little insignificant typos n grammatical error, almost goes unnoticed. Good job with your writing. Nice work. Wow longest review so far. Never crossed 1000