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2020-04-04 21:17

I like this story it is simple enough and not to lengthy. But apart from the sex scenes which are really good I must say everything else is so and so. The story progresses too quickly and there is very little character development, I mean you need to see their point of view and a little bit of emotional thinking. In the movie "Pretty Woman" the same thing happens but there is more talking and less sex. It needs developing because the seeds are there but very little was done with them. But I will read more from this author because I think there is ground for improvement.

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