Review Detail of Loyalscum in The Fallen and the realm of Beasts

There are quite a few grammar errors in your story. Also it makes no sence for the boss of the heavenly palace to only cast that girl down to the mortal relm and restrict her to gold core stage. That is far to merciful for what she did. She obviously killed a bunch of important people and that slap on the rist is the punishment.simply impossible..Also your storry does not flow smoothly enough you wrote "start of flashback" then "end of flashback" to tell readers you were having a flashback obvious red flag right there.Plus i dont feel as though she even needed a flashback there it felt so out of place. In addition because she got kicked out of the celestial relm isent she supose to be a super bad ass that does not care about the celestial relm their laws and should give no fucks about loosing all of her cultivation. I really feal like punishment is just to light. Im also a writer check out my book and leave a review like i did for you harsh criticism accepted its called unusual world. https://***.webnovel.com/book/15094015305771305/Unusual-world