It's a fairly good beginning. Tho there's a few grammatical errors here and there, it didn't really detract the reading experience. The world background was pretty straightforward making it easy to understand. The cultivation levels were not the usual cultivation levels used in novels like this. But since it's much easier to remember, I'm pretty fine with it. I can't really comment about the characters since it's only the beginning but I'm glad they're pretty distinct from one another. I do have one suggestion. Please use (,) or (.) when ending a dialogue. I noticed that you barely used either of those in your dialogues. đ Good luck!~
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