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Cloudelka
CloudelkaLv123yrCloudelka

Ok, I really like the start and I hate it from the moment it enters the Arena City. The story between Eve and him was perfect, but like any other novel (unfortunately) something serious must have happened to her (too cliché). After that, several point that disappoint me. - At the beginning a discussion with Eve that Stella was his and that it didn't bother Eve that he has other girls, but that totally changes some chapter later - He goes back to see Pengu later, but in no case goes to see Stella? or the first "toy" and future sect leader? one of the moments that started making me stop reading the novel - The death of Lucia (or Lucie?) (The Inn girl) and yeah a toy too. - Abandon Helia, for whom he was starting to have feelings. - What happenned to Katia and Elea? - Ok, there’s the problem with his soul, but frankly it becomes nonsense extract Eve's soul by ejaculating in a powerful woman, lol? - No more 18+ scenes for a while, ok, he only likes and wants Eve, but change the name of the Novel then! - "Smut Romance with THEIR Girlfriends, but after 500 chapters he still have one.

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While Others Cultivate, I Use My Unique RPG Leveling System to Cultivate Smut Romance With Their Girlfriends!

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MotivatedSloth
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Thanks for a great review! I'm honestly not bothered by the rating at all, if I can get something as detailed as this one! Now, let me explain some of the stuff that sadly wasn't to your liking. - Yeah, it changes. As did the depth of the story in my mind, as characters grew, as more stuff developed. As this story is written with only rough outline in mind (you could say, some major points only) it's only natural that it changes over time. While I perfectly understand why it might disappoint you (like, when you like certain side plots only to see them dropped) but as hard as I'm trying to connect the comedic stuff from early stage of the story with the seriousness and deep world development of the latest, it not only is a challenge by itself, but also requires a lot of planning and attention, as such, only the most important side-plots of the story will be brought up. For example, the backstory of Eve that was revealed really quickly, only starts making real sense in the current stage that the story is on right now. - Once again, yeah. As much as it might sadden you, I never intended to come back to those characters. Maybe it will happen in the future, maybe not, but I'm more inclined to believe it won't. There are some periodical characters with shallow writing about them, and there are some original enough to be worth keeping them in the story. That's why random chicks that are on the level of ant for MC are discarded, while interesting characters like Pengu still appear even so far into the story. - The part of the zombiecalypse in the arena town was intended to be some sort of clean wipe. While MC has experiences to his side, he enters new stage of his story with nothing to go back to, and only the burden forced on him by the past events (wounded and dying Eve). As simple and bland it could seem, at that point, the story already turned from comedy to more serious fantasy, warranting more decisive moves. You could say that after a period of forcing myself to write something I found funny, my natural preferences appeared. - Next two points can be summed up shortly. He did not abandon them. He had to make a decision and he chosen who he had loved more, someone he saved and found convenient, or someone he was ready to do anything for? And just like it was the case with Stella, their arc were somewhat finished (not fully, but overall). - That part... Can we forget that? You know, while writing over 500 chapters, you have times when you have nothing but drunken ideas to write about and readers are demanding chapters... Eee... Let's forget that, okay? Deal? - This story was never intended to be smut alone. It has a lot of smut, but it always was and always be a consequence of the plot. He fell in love with eve, and ****ed around with her. He was testing the limits of what she would allow for, so he had various adventures. He had problem with his own self, so he did that. But I won't focus on smut only to fill the quota. And the part about girlfriends was checked both back with Eve (who was initially someone else fiancee, even if unwillingly) through the part where her family wished to marry her off, all the way to the Helia, Katia and Elea. And changing the name is a pain far greater than you can imagine. It's not like I can just go on and update it in settings. It requires a lot of paperwork and delays, hence I never bothered with it. Overall, I didn't intend this response to be something of a defence or anything like that. I perfectly understand your points and agree with most of them, just wanted to shed some light at the other end of the rope as my silly form of thanks for going through the effort of writing such a nice review. **. Fuk, now that I see how far I went with reply, I realised I should've just written another chapter...

Cloudelka
CloudelkaLv12Cloudelka

Thank you very much for taking the trouble to read me and above all leaving such a beautiful answer! Sorry if my english is not really good, but i don't have any problem for reading, but for writting i'm really bad and sometime i use tools for helping me. I'll wait a bit before starting reading again your novel, i already said that but i really lovel the first "arc" before the problem with Eve, for me the MC without Eve is like missing an important part of the MC personality, when I think about it, this is explained when Bonger sends him to meet Eve and Eve tries to use her soul and therefore her life to fill her hole in her soul due to the loss of herself, only to learn that she was missing something since she got into this state, and for the start of the second arc personally I did not like the part with the tribes, because i have the impression that all that was used for nothing, since everything about the tribes is "abandoned" by him. (although well written) maybe just the part with the seed and an explanation on the system, I like that. I'm going to let the story go a bit before reading more of the novel. I hope the problem with Eve is soon resolved, it's already like soon 300 chapters i think without the "real" her? To see the revenge on the Katenari clan and the sect of the guard who injured Eve (forgot the name of the sect saber something) and those who betrayed him in the end, also the questions on his father, dead or alive? revenge on his clan or especially his cousin. And yes, even if that has a very low chance I really hope for Stella to reappear (Yes i know i love this character), for me even if we have not seen much she was an important character for me, just "unlocking?" her path to culture was a major turning point for me from MC thanks to her and also the fact of having saved Eve, i would have liked to see if she would have followed her master or not, yes, her, the slutty ***** master who takes 5 guys at once and maybe feel disgusted and decided to travel with Eve and the MC later as her second girlfriends (yes I surely dream about that) :D

MotivatedSloth:Thanks for a great review! I'm honestly not bothered by the rating at all, if I can get something as detailed as this one! Now, let me explain some of the stuff that sadly wasn't to your liking. - Yeah, it changes. As did the depth of the story in my mind, as characters grew, as more stuff developed. As this story is written with only rough outline in mind (you could say, some major points only) it's only natural that it changes over time. While I perfectly understand why it might disappoint you (like, when you like certain side plots only to see them dropped) but as hard as I'm trying to connect the comedic stuff from early stage of the story with the seriousness and deep world development of the latest, it not only is a challenge by itself, but also requires a lot of planning and attention, as such, only the most important side-plots of the story will be brought up. For example, the backstory of Eve that was revealed really quickly, only starts making real sense in the current stage that the story is on right now. - Once again, yeah. As much as it might sadden you, I never intended to come back to those characters. Maybe it will happen in the future, maybe not, but I'm more inclined to believe it won't. There are some periodical characters with shallow writing about them, and there are some original enough to be worth keeping them in the story. That's why random chicks that are on the level of ant for MC are discarded, while interesting characters like Pengu still appear even so far into the story. - The part of the zombiecalypse in the arena town was intended to be some sort of clean wipe. While MC has experiences to his side, he enters new stage of his story with nothing to go back to, and only the burden forced on him by the past events (wounded and dying Eve). As simple and bland it could seem, at that point, the story already turned from comedy to more serious fantasy, warranting more decisive moves. You could say that after a period of forcing myself to write something I found funny, my natural preferences appeared. - Next two points can be summed up shortly. He did not abandon them. He had to make a decision and he chosen who he had loved more, someone he saved and found convenient, or someone he was ready to do anything for? And just like it was the case with Stella, their arc were somewhat finished (not fully, but overall). - That part... Can we forget that? You know, while writing over 500 chapters, you have times when you have nothing but drunken ideas to write about and readers are demanding chapters... Eee... Let's forget that, okay? Deal? - This story was never intended to be smut alone. It has a lot of smut, but it always was and always be a consequence of the plot. He fell in love with eve, and ****ed around with her. He was testing the limits of what she would allow for, so he had various adventures. He had problem with his own self, so he did that. But I won't focus on smut only to fill the quota. And the part about girlfriends was checked both back with Eve (who was initially someone else fiancee, even if unwillingly) through the part where her family wished to marry her off, all the way to the Helia, Katia and Elea. And changing the name is a pain far greater than you can imagine. It's not like I can just go on and update it in settings. It requires a lot of paperwork and delays, hence I never bothered with it. Overall, I didn't intend this response to be something of a defence or anything like that. I perfectly understand your points and agree with most of them, just wanted to shed some light at the other end of the rope as my silly form of thanks for going through the effort of writing such a nice review. **. Fuk, now that I see how far I went with reply, I realised I should've just written another chapter...
_Yokai_
_Yokai_Lv4_Yokai_

Your novel title is really misleading... You should change it to... While others cultivate i will smut romance with my girlfreinds... Not their....

MotivatedSloth:Thanks for a great review! I'm honestly not bothered by the rating at all, if I can get something as detailed as this one! Now, let me explain some of the stuff that sadly wasn't to your liking. - Yeah, it changes. As did the depth of the story in my mind, as characters grew, as more stuff developed. As this story is written with only rough outline in mind (you could say, some major points only) it's only natural that it changes over time. While I perfectly understand why it might disappoint you (like, when you like certain side plots only to see them dropped) but as hard as I'm trying to connect the comedic stuff from early stage of the story with the seriousness and deep world development of the latest, it not only is a challenge by itself, but also requires a lot of planning and attention, as such, only the most important side-plots of the story will be brought up. For example, the backstory of Eve that was revealed really quickly, only starts making real sense in the current stage that the story is on right now. - Once again, yeah. As much as it might sadden you, I never intended to come back to those characters. Maybe it will happen in the future, maybe not, but I'm more inclined to believe it won't. There are some periodical characters with shallow writing about them, and there are some original enough to be worth keeping them in the story. That's why random chicks that are on the level of ant for MC are discarded, while interesting characters like Pengu still appear even so far into the story. - The part of the zombiecalypse in the arena town was intended to be some sort of clean wipe. While MC has experiences to his side, he enters new stage of his story with nothing to go back to, and only the burden forced on him by the past events (wounded and dying Eve). As simple and bland it could seem, at that point, the story already turned from comedy to more serious fantasy, warranting more decisive moves. You could say that after a period of forcing myself to write something I found funny, my natural preferences appeared. - Next two points can be summed up shortly. He did not abandon them. He had to make a decision and he chosen who he had loved more, someone he saved and found convenient, or someone he was ready to do anything for? And just like it was the case with Stella, their arc were somewhat finished (not fully, but overall). - That part... Can we forget that? You know, while writing over 500 chapters, you have times when you have nothing but drunken ideas to write about and readers are demanding chapters... Eee... Let's forget that, okay? Deal? - This story was never intended to be smut alone. It has a lot of smut, but it always was and always be a consequence of the plot. He fell in love with eve, and ****ed around with her. He was testing the limits of what she would allow for, so he had various adventures. He had problem with his own self, so he did that. But I won't focus on smut only to fill the quota. And the part about girlfriends was checked both back with Eve (who was initially someone else fiancee, even if unwillingly) through the part where her family wished to marry her off, all the way to the Helia, Katia and Elea. And changing the name is a pain far greater than you can imagine. It's not like I can just go on and update it in settings. It requires a lot of paperwork and delays, hence I never bothered with it. Overall, I didn't intend this response to be something of a defence or anything like that. I perfectly understand your points and agree with most of them, just wanted to shed some light at the other end of the rope as my silly form of thanks for going through the effort of writing such a nice review. **. Fuk, now that I see how far I went with reply, I realised I should've just written another chapter...
PonjuPonju
PonjuPonjuLv4PonjuPonju

it's a pretty okay manga/webtoon, too, but one can only read a few chapters before it locks the rest like webnovel does...

_Yokai_:Your novel title is really misleading... You should change it to... While others cultivate i will smut romance with my girlfreinds... Not their....
NelisPurrrrrs
NelisPurrrrrsLv2NelisPurrrrrs

I think we both are not looking forward to unlocking freaking 400 chapters.

PonjuPonju:it's a pretty okay manga/webtoon, too, but one can only read a few chapters before it locks the rest like webnovel does...