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You got an interesting plot right here, a pity that your grammar is far from perfect. Let me guess, english isn't your first language? I can tell that you give your all to make the story flow even with your limitation here. In fact, I have a certain sense of familiarity from your writing style, ah yes, I used to write like this too. Consider running a grammar checker as you write, it will help a lot on your improvement. The "god fragments" mentioned in chapter 2 kind of came out of nowhere; it lacked necessary "build-up" for the new terms to come out, is it better this way? Think of it. If it was me, I would use a subjective term such as "releasing a hidden power in him, the power of the Wind God!" in the second chapter, then will begin explaining the fragments in the later chapter instead. Come find me again if you think you have improved your grammar and syntax. I may support you further by then. For now, good luck on your journey.

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Damn, I'm Wreaking Havoc

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thank you very much