I read until 34. The writing quality is understandable but still can be improved. The story idea is not bad, the plot moves fast given the short chapters. I leave it because of the unpleasant feelings I got from reading forced situations (With a relevant character), and a secondary / villain having *** scenes with "innocent" pretty girls. Just bullshit. The MC lacks character, he looks like a rag doll. The relationships between the characters could be improved so as not to seem empty, obvious and fucking forced. There is nothing that attracts me to continue reading, and that I came for the factor of 'Kingdom Building', and the Harem, thinking that the MC was going to break it. I am disappointed, and I hope the author supports the review and does not delete it. Let everyone know what they can find, the bad taste in my mouth has saved me too many times. (Spoiler?) In a forced scene, I think it would be nice to say that there is NTR (MC). Although it does not get to be sexual. Damn commitments.
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Thank you for the Review Tyxx_4u, I respect it and I will not delete this as I can use this to help myself improve on the the things you have brought up from the story. Yet I want to make something clear, I understand the way things are going with story is not what you are excepting at first, but I think if you give some time then the best parts will come. I am not rushing or trying to go to slow with this story here, I just going the way to make sure that I am working as much as I can into the story. of course I myself will need improvement and will work on that part. Again thank you Tyxx_4u and it sad that you will no longer read my story, but I hope one day you will think about give it another try.
The truth is that thank you very much for understanding my point of view, you are respectable as an author and I admire that. Know your own mistakes and improve in a framework of mutual respect and understanding. As an avid reader I recommend you be patient with some users who simply do not respect and throw nonsense without logic or argument for the simple fact that they did not like the "X" thing and therefore the ENTIRE book is rubbish. But it's not like that. You also have to know how to appreciate the good things. For example you have pretty good ideas (to write), and know how to carry them out. Your writing quality is not bad at all, everything is fluid. I only dropped the story for the reasons I mentioned above. Anyway, I sincerely thank you for leaving the review, I respect you for that. You have to know how to love your mistakes, ironically speaking. I will leave the story in the library and when I have time I will try to read it without remembering the unpleasant feelings, I will really try. By being so insistent that the story will get better, you convinced me, I don't think it's that bad if you can write that much. As a writer, I recommend that you do a constant self-analysis of the stories, but above all remember one thing: the story is yours. And in this case it's not a damn wish-fulfillment book (I'm not saying they're bad anyway). If someone didn't like it, that's fine, drop it, and if someone liked it, congratulations. The idea is to improve every day, learn from the users of the platform and above all have fun reading something good that adapts to personal tastes. Peace and good work!
mattfuncool:Thank you for the Review Tyxx_4u, I respect it and I will not delete this as I can use this to help myself improve on the the things you have brought up from the story. Yet I want to make something clear, I understand the way things are going with story is not what you are excepting at first, but I think if you give some time then the best parts will come. I am not rushing or trying to go to slow with this story here, I just going the way to make sure that I am working as much as I can into the story. of course I myself will need improvement and will work on that part. Again thank you Tyxx_4u and it sad that you will no longer read my story, but I hope one day you will think about give it another try.
