Review Detail of JohnD in Counter chronicles

The structure of the sentences is bad. There are a lot of logical gaps and story related gaps. The story pace is moving too fast. You should restart the novel. Plan every aspect and assemble it into a story revolving around different ideas. Apart from the mostly negative points of the novel, I feel like the idea of counters has a lot of potential. You should construct it carefully and I think you can write a pretty good novel and use this chance to improve your writing quality. You can do it! You could totally ask if you need feedback to improve yourself.