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Daku_Doragon
Daku_DoragonLv135yr
2019-12-21 09:53

Beginning was a bit rough, it seems you are getting better at writing. Less run-ons and camma errors. I like the charcter ideas, but at the beginning you were going everywhere. Now it seems more solid, I would like to read more.

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Alex1911
Alex1911Lv6

I was wondering how can this novel has such a high rating, so misleading.

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RedlilyRosa
RedlilyRosaLv3

Is good I read it myself. If u read 1 chapter only and then judge then u will never understand.

Alex1911:I was wondering how can this novel has such a high rating, so misleading.
Alex1911
Alex1911Lv6

I read till ch 16, still can’t say I like it xd

RedlilyRosa:Is good I read it myself. If u read 1 chapter only and then judge then u will never understand.
RedlilyRosa
RedlilyRosaLv3

I mean that is your opinion, why u have to be so selfish and attack the author. He did nothing to u.

Alex1911:I read till ch 16, still can’t say I like it xd
Alex1911
Alex1911Lv6

Yeah, it’s my opinion. I didn’t even put up any reviews so it doesn’t affect the ratings, why do you have to attack me? it’s not even your story.

RedlilyRosa:I mean that is your opinion, why u have to be so selfish and attack the author. He did nothing to u.
EvilGodZ
EvilGodZAuthor

I think she loves you. Just joking.

Alex1911:Yeah, it’s my opinion. I didn’t even put up any reviews so it doesn’t affect the ratings, why do you have to attack me? it’s not even your story.
Felix_Neros
Felix_NerosLv13

Author deletes reviews

Daku_Doragon
Daku_DoragonLv13

Lol, didn't realize that there are comments on reviews.

EvilGodZ:I think she loves you. Just joking.
Daku_Doragon
Daku_DoragonLv13

Maybe you were toxic

Felix_Neros:Author deletes reviews
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