Ang ganda naman ng story Sana marami pang mga chapters Lalo na nung nagsurprise attack gussion sya sa kuya niya napaangas talaga Sana maraming chapters ang lumabas,Sana may mga exciting scene mga nakakainteres na scene Kung Sino kaman Jc Sana dagdagan mo ng napakaraming chapters at Sana makagawa ka pa ng napakaraming novels

Maganda yung story tska yung mga laban nila maayos rin ang pagkakagawa sa story sa typos nga lang pero maganda parin nakaka excite yung story kung anong mga susunod na mangyayari good job keep it up💜👍

Kahit 3 chapters palang maangas na hahahahaha imagination lng talaga kailangan dito kung sakaling mraming chapters pa sana mas magagandang chapters pa ung mas nakakaintense mas nakakainteres basahin ung mas exciting hahahaha good luck sau Jc keep on writing so many chapters and volumns

Please gamitin sa tamang paraan ang mga punctutation marks. As much as possible use a style guide such as AP or any style guide na preferred mo. Variations sa style ay hindi maganda sa flow ng story. Furthermore, gumamit may space after sa isang kuwit. Review punctuation rules and use them in the most appropriate way. Isa pa, the plot really needs improvement. Use more descriptors as much as possible. Gawing practical and think of every possible action that may conform with the human probability. An author must have insight.