Review Detail of premodialchoas in Lord of lust

This is my first novel and I am still trying to improve my skills, I will not call my self a author but a author in making. For those who are reading, thank you for choosing my novel and I hope you will enjoy it. I wrote this novel so that I can share my imagination with others. Currently I am looking for a free editor, through it is shameless, to make other work free for you, if anybody wants to join in the fun you can.