Review Detail of CornboyRay in Traversing the Anime Multiverse with a System
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It's too cheesy. This is too generic. The main character has a flip flop personality and never stays consistent. The author doesn't know how to write complex characters. He completely makes a disgrace of what the original creators of the licenses intended. For example, Aizen turns into a hot-headed buffoon who reacts on emotions while Ichigo turns into a submissive moron. He turns Shanks into an unintelligent idiot while he turns White Beard into... Well, he's still vaguely White Beard. Another problem that I had is that the author decided to make a love interest pop up out of nowhere just for the sake of having a love interest. She has a generic loli personality that you would see repeated constantly in other terrible FanFictions. The author obviously doesn't know how to write any type of romance, but yet continuously forces the reader to read about his garbage fire of a relationship, leaving us to cringe until our faces turn inside out. Then, he has the nerve to go the harem route! He can't even write one female character right, let alone multiple! I feel from my experience of reading 100 chapters that the author doesn't exactly know what he wants the story to be. He also doesn't know who he wants his character to be, which makes for terrible storytelling and character development. I wouldn't read this again. I would rather go outside and do something with my life... Which i guess is a good thing.
Traversing the Anime Multiverse with a System
southgamez
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No, I was completely serious. I write for fun, and that was my first ever fan fic, but I never said that it would be a good story, only that it was meant to improve my quality of grammatical usage, and make less errors. Also I was slightly kidding when I said I wanted to break people out of their delusions
Candy_Flip:I can’t tell if this is serious or you’re just trying to make it seem like you planned everything like your some sort of galaxy brain but in reality you’re genuinely struggling to write the story if it’s the first one why waste time let people enjoy what they enjoy if it’s the second dude it’s fine this is your first fic that is if you were telling the truth
Hahaha, oh nice. Feel like, discussion of 21 century arts, where someone do something stupid, but profoundly call it an art that plebs, just couldn't get.
southgamez:That's why I created this book. So people realize how **** it is and break out of their own self delusion of what they are missing out on in the real world that they will not get in the fantasy book realm. Your Welcome
Yuri_is_Ntr:Hahaha, oh nice. Feel like, discussion of 21 century arts, where someone do something stupid, but profoundly call it an art that plebs, just couldn't get.
Yuri_is_Ntr:Hahaha, oh nice. Feel like, discussion of 21 century arts, where someone do something stupid, but profoundly call it an art that plebs, just couldn't get.
XD because I want it to be sh*it. I never said it was good, just all the people who read it love Sh*it
CornboyRay:Bro... What the fuk. You seem intelligent so why is your book so s.hit.
Although I know the storyline is mess but i still love it. i really love this **** if you read the story by thinking yourself as MC you will also love this novel. But if you read this as third person then it is up to you. Every author loves his work no matter how **** the content is for others you just need to find beauty in it, I meant look in the story like how other people who love this story are looking at it. But don't take it too seriously or you will end up like me I like almost every type of story be it romance, friction slice of life comedy or tragedy or be it yaoi , yuri or straight. Hahaha I have again gone overboard.
southgamez:XD because I want it to be sh*it. I never said it was good, just all the people who read it love Sh*it
You have a great outlook on my fanfic. Thank you, another think is, this was my first fanfic that I had created. It will only get better as I progress in chapters, one I get a good grasp on what exactly I want my MC to do, everything turns out fine. Also nothing in the story is planned, I just start to write, starting where I left off the chapter before. Again, thank you for your support great Immortal Cat, I too am an Immortal.
Immortal_Cat_Sage:Although I know the storyline is mess but i still love it. i really love this **** if you read the story by thinking yourself as MC you will also love this novel. But if you read this as third person then it is up to you. Every author loves his work no matter how **** the content is for others you just need to find beauty in it, I meant look in the story like how other people who love this story are looking at it. But don't take it too seriously or you will end up like me I like almost every type of story be it romance, friction slice of life comedy or tragedy or be it yaoi , yuri or straight. Hahaha I have again gone overboard.
Honestly man, I didn't mean to hurt your feelings. I just think that your story has a lot of potential if you just tried harder. I recommend that you revise the previous chapters so that it's a more digestible story.
southgamez:You have a great outlook on my fanfic. Thank you, another think is, this was my first fanfic that I had created. It will only get better as I progress in chapters, one I get a good grasp on what exactly I want my MC to do, everything turns out fine. Also nothing in the story is planned, I just start to write, starting where I left off the chapter before. Again, thank you for your support great Immortal Cat, I too am an Immortal.
You didn't hurt any feelings XD... This was my first ever Fanfic, I expected it to be complete sh.it, I also don't feel like revising it as I am way too far into story for revisions. But thanks for your criticism, it helps me write better for future chapters
CornboyRay:Honestly man, I didn't mean to hurt your feelings. I just think that your story has a lot of potential if you just tried harder. I recommend that you revise the previous chapters so that it's a more digestible story.
southgamez:You have a great outlook on my fanfic. Thank you, another think is, this was my first fanfic that I had created. It will only get better as I progress in chapters, one I get a good grasp on what exactly I want my MC to do, everything turns out fine. Also nothing in the story is planned, I just start to write, starting where I left off the chapter before. Again, thank you for your support great Immortal Cat, I too am an Immortal.
I can’t tell if this is serious or you’re just trying to make it seem like you planned everything like your some sort of galaxy brain but in reality you’re genuinely struggling to write the story if it’s the first one why waste time let people enjoy what they enjoy if it’s the second dude it’s fine this is your first fic that is if you were telling the truth
southgamez:That's why I created this book. So people realize how **** it is and break out of their own self delusion of what they are missing out on in the real world that they will not get in the fantasy book realm. Your Welcome
southgamez:No, I was completely serious. I write for fun, and that was my first ever fan fic, but I never said that it would be a good story, only that it was meant to improve my quality of grammatical usage, and make less errors. Also I was slightly kidding when I said I wanted to break people out of their delusions