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Primate
PrimateLv45yr
2019-12-10 20:44

So far so good. The storyline is progressing very well. The characters are well defined and well fitted to their roles. The world building is good also. The best part is the writing quality. It is excellent. There are some issues with realistic expression, but this can be readjusted the more you write. All in all, grest read.

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Thank you so much! :D

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