Review Detail of Monkeyking20059575 in A Video Game God In Another World

I suck at grammar and I know this story is not going to update quickly so if that what you expect I am sorry and I have a little bit of a twisted mind so yah I am sorry and also this novel will be based off of what I want it to be and which direction it goes so yah you guys could give me advice and I might take it but I don't want to write a harem but if that is what you guys would want I will give so plz if you don't like it tell me what I did wrong so I could fix it plz and thank you