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this is stupid....here me out.......first the english...i get it,,,,,no one is great but damn it atleast fix his and her............now the story.....it is interesting but the relationships **** it up........ex: MC got betrayed by some ***** and dosnt know if he wants revenge,,,,,,,,,,MC has a wife but she hates him because she is married to him cause he is weak and some ****..........MC now wants his wife to love him even if its forced.....in the latest chps the wife is only interested in him for his sudden gain in strength.........conclusion ****ty relationships and MC that also has barely any character development mess this story up............sorry if I am harsh,....just my thoughts
Life, Death and More
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How much did you understood? MC's wife hasn't shown any interest in him even now! She was only slightly surprised by his fast growth! There aren't too many dialogues between them. There's silence only between them! I wrote it's a slow novel in the synopsis. I only wrote about MC's cultivation till now. I haven't even wrote many scenes to show his character. Revenge? If you want to know.. continue reading upcoming chapters.
could'ya fix the grammar......I only got the brother thing after reading till chp 7..............also in the later chps the relationship is kinda messed up,,,,,she kinda seems like a gold digger
Edho_Okati:How much did you understood? MC's wife hasn't shown any interest in him even now! She was only slightly surprised by his fast growth! There aren't too many dialogues between them. There's silence only between them! I wrote it's a slow novel in the synopsis. I only wrote about MC's cultivation till now. I haven't even wrote many scenes to show his character. Revenge? If you want to know.. continue reading upcoming chapters.
His/Her stays the same way, no editing. I am improving my grammar. Because of MC, she had to move to the low world, it's like blocking her way to higher realms in cultivation. Now when MC is offering her resources she is accepting them. There's nothing wrong. There are no dialogues where she spoke in a sweet tone with MC till now ! How is she a gold digger?
amaturewriter:could'ya fix the grammar......I only got the brother thing after reading till chp 7..............also in the later chps the relationship is kinda messed up,,,,,she kinda seems like a gold digger
I am just asking......chill..........she seems to stay with him cause he is strong...thats what I thought
Edho_Okati:His/Her stays the same way, no editing. I am improving my grammar. Because of MC, she had to move to the low world, it's like blocking her way to higher realms in cultivation. Now when MC is offering her resources she is accepting them. There's nothing wrong. There are no dialogues where she spoke in a sweet tone with MC till now ! How is she a gold digger?
She was sent like a guard to him, since MC is an ordinary guy. And I mentioned this "contract" topic between the MC and his wife, once in a chapter. There will be a scene in a future chapter where the contract part will be explained.
amaturewriter:I am just asking......chill..........she seems to stay with him cause he is strong...thats what I thought
sorry if I jumped to conclusions,,,,,,,,I thought the chick was some generic [chinese novel style] thot and the MC was some generic pansy man whore but thanks for explaining,,,,,,,,but I gotta say,,,,,,,,,,,if possible please try to fix the grammar of the first few chps....anyway GL
Edho_Okati:She was sent like a guard to him, since MC is an ordinary guy. And I mentioned this "contract" topic between the MC and his wife, once in a chapter. There will be a scene in a future chapter where the contract part will be explained.