Review Detail of Jenjibread in STORY NO LONGER EXIST

I really just wanted to say that your beginning actually hooked me! I loved your descriptions and just the overall mysterious mood that you had created. I think this might just be me (I was an editor in the school paper for two years), but the constant tense switching and dangling modifiers sort of threw me off and distracted me from the actual story. But good luck! I added the story to my library, so I'll definitely be back when you update again.