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2020-12-24 10:00

i really enjoy your book....❤️❤️❤️ plsss update the chapterss🙏 💛😻 i love the characters features its nice💙 plss give more updates👍✨🤩✌🏻

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The Author needs to improove a loooooooot of things. First of all the writing quality. The author tends to specify every single thing everytime. For examble: when the first villain sent assassin to kill FL and was waiting for their news she says "Where are those bastards that I sent to kill that ***** that humiliated me at the bar" or something, I think it was enough to say "Why aren't they back yet?" Sometimes it's better to not specify everything and leave the rest for the readers to assume. It gives a book a certain degree of charm. The story development is horrible, it seem a shopping list interspersed with stiff and unnatural dialogues and some random thoughts and bootlickings of side characters. The character design is not existing, when the Author introduces a knew character she never gave a basic explanation on them. The Author always says that the FL is self-confident and cold after what happened in the past, but I think she is too full of herself. Someone who had a difficult past should be cautious and never lose her temper. Another thing that I didn't like is that the ML and his friends treat the FL and her friend like some cheap pr**titutes on their second encounter. The FL is SECOND to the ML both in martial arts and wealth. The Author should learn to put oneself in the characters' shoes and describe what they are feeling accordingly. In fact in this book almost no space for the character's thoughts, something superimportant for readers to empathize with the characters. The world background is also almost not existing. Rarely the Author describes where the events are set, this is also really important for the readers to blend in the book. If you are the Author please don't take offence from my review, as I said in the first comment I quite like your point of view of love, so I started this book with positive feelings. All I said was to help you grow up as a writer. Hope my review was helpful to you.

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