Review Detail of akserhy in Heavenly Saga
Review detail
Read 20 chaoters : The premise and concept of this novel is good and well written. The only thing I can't accept is the author's blatant use of words which are contradictory. 1) He tells the 5 year kid is as mature as a youngster then that means he should be as matured as an adult when he turns 10.But the author writes that Belle and MC plays around when she visits him.🤯. Does this mean they are doing some adult stuff playing ?? They should compete with each other to check their progress as Belle is too competitive as said by author but nope they play around. 2) Dragon in this world lays very small eggs and two dragons come out of a single egg as they are twin and they simply bond with each of the MC and Belle.THICC Plot armor. 3) The author does not know about cause and effect. He writes whatever he wishes and events happens without any cause and consequences. 4) Nobody wanna kill/harm/kidnap MC. Only the dark alliance wants it and rest all wanna worship mc as god. 5)He is as mature as a youngster but cant say no to Belle cause his Body is still a KID. 6) Everything happens in favor of mc (THICC PLOT ARMOR).He is a happy go lucky naive kiddo with maturity. I hate reading story where everything is smoothsailing for mc who is naive idiotic but author keeps portraying him as intelligent and mature. This makes the story a FAIRY TALE and I have grown up from Fairy Tales. There is no suspense and thrill in reading fairytales. So If you like Fairytales this novel is for you. Alas its not for me.
Heavenly Saga
Ichiryuu
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Dear author it does not harm for MC to sometimes lose on opportunity. It could have been better if only belle had the drag as this way she can compete with mc at same level. Also, Emotions of various characters are all washed up or here and there. Simply writing he/she is happy does not portray it correctly. Also either decide the MC should be OP or weak to strong type, dont go giving him every thing (plot armor). If you do make sure to make him work hard for it and focus on cause and effect. #Veteran readers hate plot armor. This should be most likely your first novel so mistakes are unavoidable. But do improve and good luck. If the story improves later on somebody do tell me I will continue it.....
Next events ??? Something tragic ? Hmm now you got my attention. Gotta give this novel another shot. [img=exp]
Ichiryuu:Also, stories often start as a happy part of the MC's life. I wanted to give him some good experiences because of the next events that would transpire later in his life. Still, I appreciate your opinion. I would try my best to my next work, then.