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So I have read up to chapter 100 and I finally have decided to write a review. Here I will list the pros and cons that this story has and hopefully give the author some constructive criticism to further improve his writing. PROS 1. Characters seem somewhat well written unlike some Chinese novels where every character seems like an arrogant brat. 2. Story premise is actually quite enjoyable to read. 3. MC is enjoyable to read about in my opinion. CONS 1. Author seems he can't display characters emotions correctly yet. For example, in the elemental test, the MC gets a godly score with the ability to manipulate 6 different elements, and yet he doesn't even seem happy in the slightest. It seemed like, to me at least, that the MC was trying to score an impossible score. 2. Detail is mediocre at best. For example, going back to the elemental test, when the MC got tested there was no suspense, there was no detail on what the MC was feeling, there was no detail in anything he was seeing either. It just seemed like he was a robot devoid of any emotions. 3. The pace is wayyyyy too fast. It seems like one chapter he is traveling to some castle or city, and next chapter it's already 3 days in the future. Like I understand if the author was trying not to bore people with unnecessary content, but my man you gotta slow it down sometimes. Honestly, this book could be one of my top books in webnovel if the author fixed up these mistakes in the writing. I hope once the author gets more experienced in writing, he will come back to this story and completely restart it. Yeah I guess it's a naïve hope, but you can let a man wish. Thanks for taking the time reading this long and boring review, much appreciated. Thanks to the author for writing this novel, and it seems to me a lot of people enjoy it aswell so good luck!

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Ichiryuu
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I will definitely rewrite this story! I will just continue gaining more experience in writing so that when I do, I will show you the story that I envision! Thank you for the review!