Review Detail of Reg_LXIX in The Wielder of Death Magic
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Hey author i know you treasure this book. But read my review before deleted this comment. First. Everything is rushed. How did 'lucky know thay the mc had a limiter:? It wasn't even mentioned anywhere. And Lucy has killing intent from nowhere. Care to explain not here but in the story. Sceond you are' trying' to get the element of mystery or surprise but you unable to do it. Third the mc has an 'AI' that can look in to the character's weakness. Don't you think that you have added and AI and then the heir of death. A bit to much... The story os great however the turns of events as well the quality is top notch. However, here is an advice. If the first 10 chapters are great then the readers will care to get the money out of their pockets. So please. Make the story much for understand able. What you are doing is writing your thoughts and ideas that you want or thought in your story that you want it to be there immediately. YOU KNOW THEBPLOT AND WHAT WILL HAPPEN NEXT. BUT WE DON'T. Ask a person to read your story without knowing the plot and you will understand how a reader like me suffers from trying to imagine how mc has AI in his head. Give some details about.
The Wielder of Death Magic
Frostysyrup
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Thanks for the review. I'll make it clearer - it's confusing at times I can admit that. It was when I picked up writing seriously. A good rewrite is in order. Also I don't delete reviews. [Experience plays a huge part] I'm still new to this but I love every moment of it. Don't worry my man, you took the time to read, so thank you very much :D I promise to make it all better soon (will take time but that's my job xd)
Thanks for the review. I'll make it clearer - it's confusing at times I can admit that. It was when I picked up writing seriously. A good rewrite is in order. Also I don't delete reviews. [Experience plays a huge part] I'm still new to this but I love every moment of it. Don't worry my man, you took the time to read, so thank you very much :D I promise to make it all better soon (will take time but that's my job xd)
Thanks for the review. I'll make it clearer - it's confusing at times I can admit that. It was when I picked up writing seriously. A good rewrite is in order. Also I don't delete reviews. [Experience plays a huge part] I'm still new to this but I love every moment of it. Don't worry my man, you took the time to read, so thank you very much :D I promise to make it all better soon (will take time but that's my job xd)
I would recommend you to stop writing and fix upbyour error or re write first. Why Cuz you are building a building and if the base have error the further plot will be built om the error. I read that you want to write something out of the usual. That is fine Actually i also want yo write my own noval however. My plots i write become illogical. Your storyvis great however you need to explain the following 1)The world where magic is in. What is magic here? Why is technology here to? What is the history of the magic in this world. 2)Why is the mc forced to live that bad. His dad died due to a scheme. So he wants revenge. 3)What are magical creatures here. What kinds of races and stuff do you have 4)What are the magic tools weapons and enchantment. Etc. I recommend to explain the first 2 point ij first 5 chapters. Once that reader is interested you will write what you like and at the same time earn some cash. Not commenting about your life or financial stuff. Just advicing. And try to reduce romance it is a bit too. Like too many hot girls. ( it is my view) Lastly, the noblw who trashed the mc. And when the mc in hia class in the school. What he( noble) says to the mc..... You should twist the words a bit. According to me is should be like 'what is your motive' i trashed you and looked down on you how are you so calm and willing to befrinnd me? Not ' why are you not angry' The character you are trying make is of the 1600s where noble hve thier pride and DO NOT change their attitude 360 especially when the theme is THE SURVIVAL OF THE FITTEST I readbthe first 10 chapter. The story ahead i have no idea. I am just suggesting you cuz you qre friendly. I normally never care to give a review evwn if the noval ia trash or good. But your writing style is similar to mine in the start. You may have improved it layer on my i dont know. Remember majority of the people pick a book by Looking at the cover Then the summary ( write about the mqgic and world) Alright. Typ3d too much hope you benefit for it.
Frostysyrup:Thanks for the review. I'll make it clearer - it's confusing at times I can admit that. It was when I picked up writing seriously. A good rewrite is in order. Also I don't delete reviews. [Experience plays a huge part] I'm still new to this but I love every moment of it. Don't worry my man, you took the time to read, so thank you very much :D I promise to make it all better soon (will take time but that's my job xd)