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The_BP
The_BPLv154yrThe_BP

I read until the first 15 chapters cause i couldn‘t handle it anymore. The writing is all over the place. Much happens but you can only really understand some parts cause the situations aren‘t really well explained. New progress to the story isn‘t slowly introduced but as a reader you just get thrown into it. *** for Author*** In my opinion the idea of the story is great and has a very good potential. The only part thats bugs me is the writing style or the absence of any good structure in the chapters. The chapters only have a really rough structure like Beginning -> Action -> End of situation. Adding introductions or background information for new appearing characters or any real introduction for the story would probably be a good idea. There are almost no descriptions so the Tempo of the story is far to fast to get into it. And if there are descriptions they are all over the place and not really good integrated. As a reader I get the feeling that the beginning of the story is just written down without further thinking to get it to a point where the real plot should start. So I‘m dropping it since if I can‘t get into the beginning of the story there won‘t be a chance for the rest of the story.

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The Wielder of Death Magic

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The_BP
The_BPLv15The_BP

Hope you can somehow integrate the mentioned points will keep the story in my reading list hoping for the day that you rewrote the beginning, since your idea has too much potential to be dropped totally.

Frostysyrup
FrostysyrupAuthorFrostysyrup

Thanks for the feedback, and don't worry I'm slowly updating the earlier chapters. I'm grateful you stayed, thanks so much