Review Detail of DaoistahFek8 in Collapsar

The title of this fanfic is misleading. This fanfic is more about ten ten and saskue than kurama and naruto later on. Like naruto has literally learnt asura's taijutsu style, but somehow still loses to a random uchiha taijutsu style of saskue, like tf? And how does he not sense people who are peeping on him while training after all that chakra training, like, they're not even trained ninjas who can use chakra properly. The whole thing of e.g. Ten ten watching naruto train feels way too forced, like mate, how do u not feel someone who still doesn't know how to tree walk with chakra spying on u, makes no sense. Like, even if u didn't sense her atleast kurama must've, how does the strongest bijuu not feel the presence of academy kids, huh? In summation, it started off pretty good, but good things never last and too many plot holes started appearing later which really annoyed me. On the bright side, this fanfic has readable Grammar as opposed to other fanfics which r unreadable